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0 posted 2007-11-29 12:30 PM


the unseen questions

the falling of the house-dust touches me,
I feel it but I do not see; could I but hold away
its brownian tracery, its fall, and know instead
a memory of sunlight or the texture of a tangerine,
the sound of grass merged with a scent of inland gulls,
their circling pause just at the coming of the rain,
a momentary walk along the hill, hair lank in the gloom?
and would I love the flowers while they bloom,
the morning glorys and the dark jasmine?
could I even now, the lace of time that yields so slow,
might there still somewhere in me be breath and time
to live, not wholly circumscribed in words,
to reach somehow the window, fingers gliding smooth,
to touch the glass and feel the songs of birds?


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1 posted 2007-11-29 06:00 AM


Not sure if I understood all of this, but I could relate to what I thought it said. I, too, wonder if I am wasting a lot of life being an observer and sometimes translator/reporter...sometimes I just miss dancing.

Nicely done Ed.

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2 posted 2007-11-29 06:04 AM


could I even now, the lace of time that yields so slow,
might there still somewhere in me be breath and time


Wonderful lines Ed.  It has been too long
since I have had the pleasure of reading you m'friend.  Nicely done.

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3 posted 2007-11-29 01:16 PM


DearestDearestEd~

'and know instead
a memory of sunlight or the texture of a tangerine'


and-

'might there still somewhere in me be breath and time
to live, not wholly circumscribed in words,
to reach somehow the window, fingers gliding smooth,
to touch the glass'


Seems to me to be some very tender moments in time ... remembered somewhat with a wistful sadness~ for what might have been~

BIG *HUGLETS* for you~
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4 posted 2007-11-29 01:27 PM


Waiting here,

waiting here to breathe,
to touch,
to hold.

But all is gone
as dust drifts down

upon an empty room.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

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5 posted 2007-11-29 01:40 PM


and the invisible answers
the echo of long lost bird' song
falling off with the neglected house-dust
in far corner of memory.

beautiful poem. beautiful!!

Tomtoo

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6 posted 2007-11-29 03:16 PM


This one started out as a way of expressing something I was feeling, that my sensitivity as a poet was turning dull, that I was "going blind" poetically....and as a way of assuring myself that I still "have it" if I'll find the reserves to stand up and walk to the window of my soul. Hopefully that will turn out to be true, because it's exactly what I'm doing now.

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7 posted 2007-11-29 04:26 PM


Dear Ed...You would not been able to write this poem if you could not.  You have answered your own question, me thinks.
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8 posted 2007-11-29 06:40 PM


I totally agree with Martie, Ed!  Stunning write!   I most often read poetry aloud.  This is simply stunning, RatL.   I'm so glad to see you writing again.

misC

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9 posted 2007-11-29 07:22 PM


As a scientist, I can’t help but be attracted to the line
containing ‘brownian tracery!’

I am also particularly fond of imagery such as:

“the sound of grass merged with a scent of inland gulls”;

“the lace of time”;

AND, especially the ending!:

“to live, not wholly circumscribed in words,
to reach somehow the window, fingers gliding smooth,
to touch the glass and feel the songs of birds?”

Serious, sustained applause
for this excellent ‘write’!


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10 posted 2007-11-29 07:45 PM


quote:
the sound of grass merged with a scent of inland gulls,
their circling pause just at the coming of the rain,



Wonderful lines!!

Enjoyed this very much.

Love,
Margherita

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11 posted 2007-11-30 06:10 PM


. . . …………..


the unseen questions

the falling of the house-dust
I feel it but do not see;

could I but hold away
its brownian tracery, its fall,
and know instead a memory of sunlight
or the texture of a tangerine,

the sound of grass
merged with a scent of inland gulls,
their circling pause
just at the coming of the rain,

a momentary walk along the hill,
hair lank in the gloom?
and would I love

the flowers while they bloom,
the morning glories and the dark jasmine?
could I even now, the lace of time

that yields so slow,
might there still somewhere
be breath and time
to live, not wholly circumscribed

in words,
to reach somehow the window,
fingers gliding smooth,
to touch the glass
and feel the songs of birds?

………


Good Ed


John

P.S.

As has no moment.
Invisible present,
still beside.

Sorrow and joy.
The calm that comes from glad return
forgotten to mind.

Or scene its essence,
detail lost,
unspoken in its beauty.

Not breathing
but breathing
the silent understanding of breath.
                      
Symphonies of feelings.
One must think
in tones,
shades,
great and soft
gentle sweeps.
An ebb and rise of tides.

The slow
and rapid rhythms
learned in turning from words,

obsequious courtiers
offering imperfect keys.



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12 posted 2007-11-30 09:45 PM


I think half the joy of sensing these things is that we use words to shjare the emotion with others and you do that so very well.

Always do more than is required of you George Patton

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13 posted 2007-12-01 12:57 PM


Sometimes I dream of how nice it would be to just sit and observe - whatever the happenstance... But I have this irristable urge to find a pen... I wonder how many scenes/slides in life I missed while looking for a pen.

dale

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14 posted 2007-12-04 01:17 PM


could I even now, the lace of time that yields so slow,
might there still somewhere in me be breath and time
to live, not wholly circumscribed in words,
to reach somehow the window, fingers gliding smooth,
to touch the glass and feel the songs of birds?

Your words amaze me... both in the poem and in your response. For such gripping clarity to be written by one fearing his own poetic blindness is more than incredible... it's his answer flowing from his own pen.

Keep walking to that window, my friend... or should the day come when your legs won't carry you, give a shout... I'll take you there.

Stunning work!!

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