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Kazm
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0 posted 2007-11-28 07:26 PM



One by one they fall
down to the lake of lonely,
one tear, another, and
there is a stream that follows
on to somewhere I can’t reach;

will it find some wider ocean,
you on the other side?

It flows;
will I never be empty?

                                                 Kaz

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Midnitesun
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Gaia
1 posted 2007-11-28 07:32 PM


You...are like a ghost from the mist!
The last time....you left us 'doors'....
This 'one' is so poignant, like the cry of a loon.

Kazm
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since 2003-11-13
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2 posted 2007-11-28 07:46 PM


It was a better time for me then, that is a surety. I'm glad someone remembered!

                                                 Kaz

Gumpy
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since 2007-11-06
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3 posted 2007-11-28 07:54 PM


I really feel for sorrow. For I am a tributary to yhe ocean also.

Gumpy

How is it that after your heart is ripped out, you feel so much?

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4 posted 2007-12-04 12:18 PM


I click on a name I haven't seen in far too long... and immediately remember why I missed your words so much!

Even if I'd never shed a tear... or wondered if they'd ever stop leaking... I'd be touched by the picture of loneliness you paint so poignantly.

This is magnificent!

Kethry
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5 posted 2007-12-04 03:12 PM


I agree with the others this is a perfect picture of sorrow.

tears will one day stop
though happiness seems gone away
tomorrow brings joy

Always do more than is required of you George Patton

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