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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines 
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Each day that passes misses more the rhyming rhythm once before of Sy and thoughts that he could bend from words of heart in special blend: More Titled Sighs The test is ours to touch a butterfly of happiness, to lift every rock with velvet glove and pace the footsteps of the true path on our journey of dreams. The eye of I, still sees the ocean of thought through the creation of the mind within the valley of acceptance. And even when hobbling (with sand in my shoes) I look back, fixed on the phasing of change. Each touch of life, like walking in the rain, the mist of once upon, a mark of time, a show of love to silence the dieing embers. And leave me to picture... an evening's dream. M "Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less." |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MzBliss~ You *sigh* Sir Sy so softly~ Thank you for these~ *Huglets* to the Sy Man !!  *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
*smile* Sying... Missing one's Sy. Very touching M. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
I sigh with you, dear Maureen! This is so sensitive and beautiful. How we miss him! Love, Margherita  |
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TinaTrivett Senior Member
since 2006-07-15
Posts 569 |
I missed what's wrong with Sy...hope he's alright. Loved the write. |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Again, thank you for Sy words while he is away from his computer. "late" |
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Bob K Member Elite
since 2007-11-03
Posts 4208 |
Dear NakdThoughts, I saw your comment on Huan Yi's 11/26/07 posting and thought you made a lot of sense. You do understand the need for the specific, I think, but from what I see in this poem and the other current posting of yours, also about this person named Sy, it's sometimes hard to put into action. I think this person named Sy must be wonderful indeed to be worthy of such outpourings. He should feel flattered. From reading your work, I wonder if you've been reading much Modern American Poetry from outside this website. I think you may be missing a very important source of essential vitamins and minerals in your poetry diet. I hesitate to suggest any poets in particular, lest you feel I'm steering you poorly, but there are lots of terrific writers, men and women both, that have appeared in journals and books over the last 20 years, and I don't see that you're getting the variety of examples that would be helpful for you here. By all means, keep up here; but try to do some substantial outside reading as well. This looks like a fairly sealed poetry universe with fine support and many advantages. Why not look at what's being published outside as well, simply for perspective? Best wishes, BobK. Also I wish good things for the much admired Sy. He sounds like he deserves them. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I notice Bob that you don't wish for critiques under you profile for your poetry. If you had checked under mine you would have noticed the same. I really don't know what your purpose was for the comment under my poem about another response under someone elses... Huan Yi , I believe, knows me well enough that the answer was sort of "tongue in cheek" to his short poem... For those who have been on here long enough may understand my position in life and my reasons for being here. Secondly, I have read much poetry in here, and in books over my lifetime. How I write and express myself is my own style and is meant to let those who read, gain whatever they feel from it or "not". I don't mind your response and am taking no offense to it. I am just explaining that I am not in the critical analysis forum and am writing for pure pleasure and relief. This poem and another were to use another's titles who is not feeling up to par right now...and I thought many of his words could be put to a meaning that would help to cheer him up, besides the fact that he is a fairly good poet on here and well respected. If you care to expand on my problems as a poet or person or "not well read" student of poetry, you are welcome to email me. Maureen |
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Snowflake From Hell Senior Member
since 2003-07-10
Posts 777My own little Icey Oblivion |
nice write violence may not be the answer, but it does make good headway |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Well now your kind and sensitive heart is right up here for all to see, and I hope that Sy reads this Maureen. What a caring way to show he is thought about. Heck, you read me, so therefore you must be very well-read  Take care now. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
M-Lady, this is a most thoughtful poem and lovely rendering. This place doesn't seem quite the same without his daily treats. *hugs*....jo |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
enyoyed the read ... and even more your reply... j. |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
Lovely Maureen, Enjoyed the poem. However, I was more entertained with your deft response to the critic. AND, in both endeavors, your inner beauty prevails :-) H, Robert |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
good read  |
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