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chickoo007
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0 posted 2007-11-15 06:53 AM



This is my 1st post,hope to learn new things from here


Incredible India -- A Paradox

So many problems,so less a time,
Need to do something,to clean away the grime.
Three-fourth of the population is as yet benighted,
The rest though literate,have yet to be enlightened.
It is due to this illiteracy,that poverty is growing in sizes,
People are starving to death and a greater problem arises,
Men folk in poverty,beg on the streets.
Women illiterate,rendered effete.
Children are starving,they are weeping to death.
Everyone is trying to rob the other of his breath.
Such is the apathy of my country,that children as young as four,
Are made to work at signals and do the daily chore.
But the 'NETAS' remain unperturbed,with deaf ears and closed eyes,
Just creating policies and rendering cheap advice.
Unknown about the problems,that the people are undergoing,
The attitude of the overseer,every moment,keeps on lowing.
All the abound number of 'NETAS',that my country resides,
Have just one bonafide effort,to earn money and increase ties.
Many in this chaos,have died and many,shall still expire,
What cruelty has been done! What has become of my shire!
Such impecunios,such indigent,such impoverished INDIA,
What an irony,Indeed a paradox,they call it
"INCREDIBLE INDIA".....


P.S.--- NETAS=POLITICIANS(in hindi)

Hope i recieve atleast a few comments for this
THANKS...



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iliana
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1 posted 2007-11-15 07:01 AM


Wecome to PIP, Chickoo007!  Good start!  My husband actually was born and raised in India although he was an ex-pat.  From what he has told me, sounds like your poem is right on.  We all hope for a better world and better lives for your countrymen and women.  
chickoo007
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2 posted 2007-11-15 07:47 AM


Thanks!!!! Hope India does become incredible but yes as it has evolved from 'The Land Of Snake Charmers' it shall evolve from the vicious circle of illiteracy and poverty too..
(though many great and rich people do reside here in india yet the problems do remain...)
Thanks again U r d first one 2 atleast read my poem and reply

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3 posted 2007-11-15 08:44 AM


Ajit~
Welcome to this circle of friends~

You obviously take great pride in what India can, and will, become~

Keep your perspectives, for out of creative thinking come the ideas to change your country for the better~

It is GREAT to have you with us~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

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chickoo007
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4 posted 2007-11-15 08:50 AM


THANKS!!!!!
Gumpy
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5 posted 2007-11-15 09:04 AM


Welcome to pip. I'm also new, and have already found this site a great place to be.
I look forward to logging in daily.

Hope to see more reads.

Gumpy

chickoo007
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6 posted 2007-11-15 09:09 AM


Me Too......
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7 posted 2007-11-15 10:05 AM


Ajit,

Welcome to Passions. I like the depth of your hope...for it is that very hope that stirs up action...

Please! Check your email for a Very Special Greeting!

" It matters not this distance now  " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love
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8 posted 2007-11-15 01:32 PM


How do you do, chickoo?!? ~ Please excuse my lame attempt at a poetic welcoming!

With your write, you put a light on India's plight. Oh, no! There I go again! Please forgive me!

Seriously speaking, I was feeling every word, seeing every image, that you imparted so vividly.

"The rest though literate,have yet to be enlightened.
It is due to this illiteracy,that poverty is growing in sizes,"

~ Your own literacy (and caring and compassionate heart) is evident through this fine write.

Giving you a warm, welcoming hug,

Earth Angel



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9 posted 2007-11-15 01:51 PM


First of all, welcome to the site, you will enjoy it here I am sure.  Your poem is a painting I saw from both sides.

The one thing I noticed in India when we were there was that there seemed to be no "middle class."  Having gone for a wedding of one of your wealthier residents, I saw it from that side, and saw some incredible "waste."  When  on my own time, I viewed the plight of the extremely poor, and can't tell you how saddened I was by the poverty there.  I believe it is passed on from one generation to the other, and it is only people such as yourself that can make a change in India.

You and people like you hold the key to change, and that is only done with education, and a will to dream to want more.  It is there for all to have.  Again, welcome.

Oh, and you made me remember my favorite Gandhi's saying, "An eye for an eye only makes the whole world blind."


              
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JamesMichael
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10 posted 2007-11-15 02:24 PM


Enjoyed reading this informative writing...James
chickoo007
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11 posted 2007-11-16 09:17 AM


Thank you all so very much .... )
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