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JamesMichael
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0 posted 2007-11-10 04:39 AM


Last Words

My whole world
is crumbling,
rapidly falling
apart, as if
someone that I love
drove a sword
through my heart.
I'm bleeding profusely,
my life ebbing away,
last words
escape my lips
"I love you,
even upon my
dying day."

JamesLee
09November
2007


[This message has been edited by JamesMichael (11-10-2007 12:44 PM).]

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Margherita
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Eternity
1 posted 2007-11-10 05:54 AM


Wow, dear James, this is very intense ... your heart in need to express this love so great that it will last into eternity.

Well done!

Love,
Margherita

Gumpy
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since 2007-11-06
Posts 143
Canada
2 posted 2007-11-10 06:21 AM


WOW.
"My whole world
is crumbling,
rapidly falling
apart, as if
someone that I love
drove a sword
through my heart."

I know your pain.
To put it in writing stems the flow a little.


Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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since 2000-01-29
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Sydney, Australia
3 posted 2007-11-10 06:42 AM


James...  my friend... are you ok?   RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

JL
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Texas, USA
4 posted 2007-11-10 07:26 AM


Nice write James.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.

hunnie_girl
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5 posted 2007-11-10 04:02 PM


very beautifully written James I really enjoy your words
Krysti

JamesMichael
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6 posted 2007-11-11 04:03 AM


Thank you Margherita, Roniece, Gumpy, JL and hunnie_girl for the wonderful responses...
Roniece I'm alright, I have to make some hard choices, none of which I am thrilled about...James

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