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Honeybunch
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0 posted 2007-11-10 03:47 AM


Ready, steady, go, and she tumbles into soul
a stranger to the diocese of the most beautiful
unable to assimilate the meaning and intent
of her sink into the feel of the newly attuned.

But this merge of soul a “get to know you” stage
that filters to the brain of one inclined to know
and she of mortal leanings must undergo a shift
to comfortably embrace this different approach
to the finding and the keeping of amazing grace.

She squirms in the heat of a previous belief
burning like a body set upon a pyre
but bows to the known so long in strangulation
of soul’s innate wildness
in her need to return to a cooler state.

Cool for a minute, an hour, day, week,
but determined flames soon reappear
and burn away the vestiges of outdated beliefs
that held the love of soul a not so splendid thing.

Now cornered in the knowing a merge will always bring
she suffers like insomniacs the absence of peace
but well she knows her lifetime is
only a moment away from loving you.

Believe it or not, understand it or not,
but there is one who knows!


Helen / 10 November 2007 www.dreamtimepoetry.com

[This message has been edited by Honeybunch (11-10-2007 06:32 AM).]

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Earth Angel
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1 posted 2007-11-10 04:02 AM


Hi, Honey!

Sounds as though she is getting her wings! Off with the old dogma and on with the spiritual attunement!

Is "the one who knows" ~ THE ONE who knows?

Love & God's Light,

Linda


Margherita
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2 posted 2007-11-10 04:24 AM


quote:
to comfortably embrace this different approach
to the finding and the keeping of amazing grace.



Oh my, oh my, dear Helen! You have outdone yourself with this one I would say!!

There is ONE who knows no doubt ...

Deeply captivating and so beautifully written!

Love,
Margherita

JL
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3 posted 2007-11-10 07:24 AM


"Now cornered in the knowing a merge will always bring
she suffers like insomniacs the absence of peace
but well she knows her lifetime is
only a moment away from loving you."

Such enthusiasm in the suffering in absence of peace,yet the reward of that love for the persistence will be an adequate fulfillment.

Dynamic write, enjoyed this very much.

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.

Honeybunch
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4 posted 2007-11-10 07:37 AM


Linda, Margherita, and JL - Thank you so much for your comments. Words do relieve the "pressure" somewhat but I guess one still cries out in the night, the day, or just any old time when feeling the heat.  

Thanks again!

Helen

Martie
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5 posted 2007-11-11 10:06 PM


Hello Helen

but well she knows her lifetime is
only a moment away from loving you.

How I love those two lines!  I hope you are well...I've missed you.

iliana
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6 posted 2007-12-07 02:17 AM


Helen, I had been missing reading you and I went search.  I was delighted to read this....wow!  I hope your days are full of grace and love.   .....jo
Honeybunch
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7 posted 2007-12-07 02:25 AM


Thanks, Jo.  Lovely to see you here.  I'm just "sleeping" though some would call it "working" but thank you for pulling me back here.  I'll never catch up on the poems posted in my absence which I know is my loss.  Hope you are well.  One can miss the blue pages so much but I'm sure I'll wake up once the nighmare has passed - the nighmare of "life" but isn't that a good thing because we know we will wake up eventually.
Hugs
Helen

iliana
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8 posted 2007-12-07 02:52 AM


I've been in the same place, Helen.  It's pretty much been just this week that I have posted a little.  Be well, my friend.  Luv ya.......jo
nakdthoughts
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9 posted 2007-12-07 05:59 AM


"'m sure I'll wake up once the nighmare has passed - the nighmare of "life" but isn't that a good thing because we know we will wake up eventually."

so true, Helen. I have missed your words and hope you are well~~


M

LeeJ
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10 posted 2007-12-07 08:59 AM


you are certainly in fine form this morn....what a stunning write...you are a languid sea of words, wisely rolling them all together into visuals that define life and all it's trials and tribulations, along with the magical moments and knowing what we have is simply the offspring of some spiritual meaning....

hugs to you

jwesley
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11 posted 2007-12-07 05:39 PM


Terrific write, my friend...both times I read it.

Jwesley

vandana
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12 posted 2007-12-07 06:21 PM


enjoyed
JamesMichael
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13 posted 2007-12-07 06:23 PM


Fantastic...James
Lincoln
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14 posted 2007-12-07 07:04 PM


loved it
Sunshine
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15 posted 2007-12-07 07:06 PM


The growth in this is splendid, Helen...

and the woman doesn't even need to roar...

a quiet takeover, for sure.




Honeybunch
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16 posted 2007-12-08 02:26 AM


Thank you all so much for reading and for commenting.  I guess our "heroine" in the story has tumbled onto shaky ground but she'll find her feet again one day, some day, before the story ends.  
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