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Connel
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0 posted 2007-11-09 05:36 AM


I've been writing a lot lately...

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And gently I'll lift this broken soul again,
from yet another fallen failure.
The shadows that consumed my past,
they now blind my future...
I know they've won.

It's not your words I cannot grasp,
it's how they mean nothing.
You've broken your grace on my soul,
but it was I left limped.
You were forged in hate, but briefly loved;
I know you've won.

Please, - spare me;
let it be over, don't ignore my plea;
I can't hide from this... not now.
I cannot sulk, please, not now.
It's in finality that my deadened heart, beating alas,
...surrenders, I know I've lost.

Edited last lines a bit.

[This message has been edited by Connel (11-11-2007 12:51 AM).]

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1 posted 2007-11-09 08:49 AM


Such a poignantly written HEARTACHE!
Keep that pen busy....

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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2 posted 2007-11-10 11:22 PM


And gently I'll lift this broken soul again,
from yet another fallen failure.
The shadows that consumed my past,
they now blind my future...
I know they've won.

It's not your words I cannot grasp,
it's how they mean nothing.
You've broken your grace on my soul,
but it was I left limped.
You were forged in hate, but briefly loved;
I know you've won.

Please, - spare me;
let it be over, don't ignore my plea;
I can't hide from this... not now.
I cannot sulk, please, not now.
In finality, my deadened heart, beating alas;
... surrendered, I know I've lost.

oh my... I love this!  RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Connel
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3 posted 2007-11-11 12:48 PM


I edited the last two lines... I like it better this way.



Thank you both for the comments.

Embrace the shadows.

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