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Dance Club Saturday Night

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JamesMichael
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0 posted 11-06-2007 06:17 AM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for JamesMichael

Dance Club Saturday Night


Gaslight torches
flicker within
the breeze as
dancers sway with
rhythm and ease.
Locals and tourist
in floral shirts
and party dresses
share laughs and fun,
hugs and caresses.
On the veranda I spot
a cockroach and a gecko
climbing the wall,
as if the beat of the music
from the dance club calls.
"Feel It Up, Little Darling."
the words and the beat
take the crowd into the night,
a big Samoan bouncer moves
in to break up a fight.
The band takes a break
and poses for pictures
with some local girls
that are party fixtures.
Leaving I see a woman so fine,
but no where near as fine as mine.

JamesLee
06November
2007
Mai Tai Bar
Ala Moana Mall
Waikiki


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marcel
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1 posted 11-06-2007 12:49 PM       View Profile for marcel   Email marcel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for marcel

like how you captured the night as a photographer would. nice write.  
Margherita
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Very nice, dear James!
And I love the ending line, which shows that you kept your priorities well in sight.

Love,
Margherita
Earth Angel
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"Leaving I see a woman so fine,
but no where near as fine as mine."

~ Hold that thought! lol


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4 posted 11-09-2007 04:09 PM       View Profile for JL   Email JL   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JL

"big Samoan bouncer moves
in to break up a fight."

Brings back some old memories...

Nice write James.

JL


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JamesMichael
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5 posted 06-27-2008 02:39 AM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Thank you...James
Earl Brinkman
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Good description of a saturday night at a dance club complete with a big Samoan bouncer.
 
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