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nevermore93
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since 2007-10-24
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0 posted 2007-11-03 12:33 PM



Senses fail me while I await for your arrival
I keep listening for the sound of your voice
Its brilliant eloquence and comforting aura
Yet, all I hear is the wind mocking my plight

Senses fail me while I await for your arrival
I look for you in the shadows of the moonlit night
Its mystery haunts me, as does my memory of you
Yet, all I see is the flicker of a candle dwindling

Senses fail me while I await for your arrival
I touch the picture of you from our time together
The warmth of its touch, is as if I'm holding you
Yet, all I feel is the cold of the winter night

Senses fail me while I await for your arrival
I detect the fragrance of lilacs in the air
Its aroma fills me with thoughts about your beauty
Yet, all I smell is the burning ash of the fire

Senses fail me while I await for your arrival
I can taste the joy radiating all over the place
It reminds me of all the wondeful things we've done
Yet, all I can taste is the bitterness of my tongue

Now I admit that since I have lost touch with you
I can't continue on. I have lost myself forever
And now since my only request is to see you again
Senses fail me while I await for your arrival

[This message has been edited by nevermore93 (11-04-2007 11:30 PM).]

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Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
1 posted 2007-11-03 07:43 AM


Elias, this is truly beautiful, it's difficult to associate such longing with your youth, but with a name like this you really must be an "old soul" ...

don't worry, just expressing my thoughts.

I especially loved:

Senses fail me while I await for your arrival
I detect the fragrance of lilacs in the air



The fragrance of lilacs makes ME lose my senses!!

Very lovely work.

Love,
Margherita

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27
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2 posted 2007-11-03 08:12 PM


A hurting heart, yet so sweetly ~ and poetically ~ expressed.

I could sense the longing ~ and the inner turmoil. Well done, Poet!


EA


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