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Xillus_Xavier
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since 2007-10-05

Posts 72
Alabama

0 posted 2007-10-31 08:52 PM

Standing On Soothing Shores

The rolling tide massages shore
And feet that seeks its soothing hands
My agony sweeps out to sea
Away, amidst receding sands

My hurt, these waves - they've met before
For years I've come to stand and cleanse
But though my woes flow from these toes
The wrinkled soles retain their sins

The salty breeze, it sings to me
A cheerful sun bequeaths relief
For death, divorce, all lifes' remorse
Have found a home within the reef.

And I shall stand in waves today
As all my thoughts just fade away

[This message has been edited by Xillus_Xavier (10-31-2007 10:26 PM).]

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

1 posted 2007-10-31 10:05 PM

Beautiful cadence.
Check your second to last line...
The and leaves a ridge on the smooth of this excellent write.

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

2 posted 2007-11-01 04:57 AM

Very beautiful, those shores invite to ponder life indeed.

And they invite to LET GO!

I love the thought of being reborn anew into every new day ... READY TO LOVE, free of past burdens.

Love,
Margherita

lyricpoet
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since 2005-07-16

Posts 199
NY, USA

3 posted 2007-11-01 06:48 AM

This is a lovely write, thanks for sharing!

Author Kevin Brian Wright 2007

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

4 posted 2007-11-01 08:42 AM

More beautiful with every read.

Thanks for writing this.
TD

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

5 posted 2007-11-01 10:25 AM

Well writ

HopeS
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since 2000-12-22

Posts 4596
Perth Western Australia

6 posted 2007-11-02 03:14 AM

Wonderfully expressed , often I toss any painful emotion into the ocean

Hope

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

7 posted 2007-11-02 10:35 AM

Every veritable line, is a gem!!! ~ both in content and in form!!!

You had my ardent attention from

"The rolling tide massages shore
And feet that seeks its soothing hands
My agony sweeps out to sea
Away, amidst receding sands"

...all the way down to the perfect closing couplet ~

"And I shall stand in waves today
As all my thoughts just fade away"

Loved it!!!

EA

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

8 posted 2007-11-03 03:53 AM

Lovely poem Xillus.
Ida

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