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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! 
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Rhythms and Cycles As evening falls… stand still in the billowing mist of an ancient Autumn-forest. Listen to the mystic-footfall echoes of all who passed this way before, mid the quiet cadence of retreating shadows. Walk beneath a silent storm of stars along the moon-silver beach, where calls the awe-inspiring sea. Let the whispers of your imminent dreams and the ‘light’ of Nature’s infinite renewal, brush your dusty mind… clear your cloudy soul… warm your flash-frozen heart… in the vast, radiant hope and promise of a new-dawning day! 10/28/2007 |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
you love writting about fall, i love your fall poems dont you ARCTIC WIND [This message has been edited by Artic Wind (10-29-2007 02:16 PM).] |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"Let the whispers of your imminent dreams and the ‘light’ of Nature’s infinite renewal, brush your dusty mind… clear your cloudy soul… warm your flash-frozen heart…" A beautiful mantra, dear dream poet.. It invites the reader to repeat these thoughts daily, to shower the planet with positive dreams of hope. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: Very beautiful and inspiring write, dear Bruce. Love, Margherita |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Bruce, I could read your exquisite Fall poems, all day long! They are magnificent ~ as is the season that your pen captures exceptionally well. ~ Each line is an autumnal treasure!!! Love & Fall Splendor, Linda |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Bruce~ I enjoy knowing just how much you enjoy being in this poetic circle~ Each contribution you make gives the reader such a versatile assortment of your poetic thoughts to leaf through~ Thank you~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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Kalle Member
since 2007-10-15
Posts 89Finland |
What does "Ancient forest" mean? How is it possible for forest to be ancient? Ancient is a term that refers to anthropocentric cycles, or time-lines But forest, nope, can`t say I have seen Ancient forest, neither post-modern ones... |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
What are you...a professional 'nit picker'?! 'Ancient' can simply mean "of times long past" or 'having existed a long time'...pristine, etc. |
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Kalle Member
since 2007-10-15
Posts 89Finland |
I understood you encouraged constructive critisism. And in order for your poetry to attain an adequate (or even average) level of inner reality in terms of internal contextivity I suggest you abstain yourself from the usage of words of which meaning you do not fully apprehend. |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
The phrase "level of inner reality in terms of internal contextivity" is highly redundant and verbose... and, no one will 'benefit' from picayune commentary; furthermore, you may want to seek out a better dictionary! |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Bruce - some people just need to be ignored but out of kindness really lest they show too much ignorance. I loved your poem! Thank you! |
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ArtSolstice Member
since 2007-03-18
Posts 498 |
This writing is exquisite ! Particularly enjoyed: "stand still in the billowing mist of an ancient Autumn-forest. Listen to the mystic-footfall echoes of all who passed this way before, mid the quiet cadence of retreating shadows. Walk beneath a silent storm of stars" ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ ~Especially~ the ancient Autumn-forest!! and "Let the whispers of your imminent dreams and the ‘light’ of Nature’s infinite renewal, brush your dusty mind… clear your cloudy soul… warm your flash-frozen heart… " If this doesn't generate tears, what does? It is exceptionally beautiful and greatly enjoyed. |
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Kalle Member
since 2007-10-15
Posts 89Finland |
I wasn`t referring to the external part of your brainjangle textualized, It sounds pretty good, if you don`t think the content, which, the way I see it, respectfully, is nil. |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
When someone (correctly) pointed out that the form of my first attempt at writing a Tanka was slightly wrong and my earliest Rictameter was fairly far off (in style and form)…now, THAT was useful criticism! Attempting to place 'anthropocentric' restrictions on the contemporary range of uses for (and/or synonyms of) the word ‘ancient’ is absurdly superfluous. I have several unabridged dictionaries and word menu/(usage) texts here that (though they differ somewhat in included definitions and synonyms) place no such limits on the word in question. I will waste no more valuable time on said specific issue or other 'nil' commentary. [This message has been edited by secondhanddreampoet (10-29-2007 05:33 PM).] |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice read  |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Bruce~ I'm glad to see that you are wasting no more time on those comments ... your poetry rises far above any need to 'bicker' about what you do SO WELL~ As one who knows the Ancients well ... I am kin to that ancient forest too~ Keep on keeping on, poet~ You and your poetry ROCK~  *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Bruce, Not sure where you got that target on your back but I'd shake it off. It's better ignored and with any luck the comments will go away. Good to see you writing and yup "the ancient forest" is a perfectly understood poetic phrase.  If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Hi Bruce, The best poet on the sight should pay no attention to one on the worst. There is clearly some sort of issue here. I knew it when there was a comment on of Huan Yi's poems called "Cancer" that was totally inappropriate. I used "ancient forest' in one of my own poems. Everyone knows that the Redwood forest, (for example) is an ancient forest. Ida |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
Ah, Bruce - I did so need a bit of a laugh. I love your poetry - you are a painter of word pictures, and when I close my eyes I see the beauty you describe so eloquently. Thank you for sharing yet again - I have continued to read in my rather long spell of silence. And, your poems are among those I seek out to enjoy and savor. A |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
I came back to repeat this is exquisite imagery and ancient forests are this poet's favorite dream forest!!! Pay no heed to those who challenge you on your use of the word "Ancient".....or any other word!!! |
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ArtSolstice Member
since 2007-03-18
Posts 498 |
Way to say it, Midnightsun, MarchMadness and all others who commented positively on this write! I agree completely. |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
well...this is most likely the 1st. and last time I will have '20-something' comment/reply posts on a write!...heck of a way to achieve said 'milestone!' |
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