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Huan Yi
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since 2004-10-12
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Waukegan

0 posted 2007-10-24 02:33 PM


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This day is mine

October
Beautiful

Not his hers
Theirs . . .
Mine

The gold leaves
Flow over the steep hills
Down to a crystal stream

Water mirrors the trees
The clear blue sky
A small brown sparrow
Flying by

The sunlight glows
In the afternoon
Flickers dances
Waltzes with the breeze

I don’t care
What the world
Might have to say
With all its
Endless casuistry

This day
Is mine
Because I’m free
And earned it


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© Copyright 2007 John Pawlik - All Rights Reserved
Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989

1 posted 2007-10-24 02:51 PM


Absolutely brilliant...a beautiful message in these words, and indeed they made me smile.  Lovely writing John.
Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural
2 posted 2007-10-24 04:08 PM


This day was so nice
nice weather
nice air

Lovely poem

ARCTIC WIND

secondhanddreampoet
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since 2006-11-07
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3 posted 2007-10-24 06:00 PM


Another fine ‘write’!

I am particularly fond of:

that ‘flicker danc(ing)’ and
‘breeze waltz(ing)’ sunlight!

AND:

“I don’t care
What the world
Might have to say
With all its
Endless casuistry”

(especially the use of ‘casuistry’)

Once again, serious applause!!

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
4 posted 2007-10-28 04:02 AM


Nice writing...first time I've seen that word...casuisty...James
Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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since 2000-01-29
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Sydney, Australia
5 posted 2007-10-28 05:57 AM


This day
Is mine
Because I’m free
And earned it

bravo !  well said!  RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

TomMark
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since 2007-07-27
Posts 2133
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6 posted 2007-10-31 09:48 AM


I say.... those are free heavenly presents.
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