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Gentle Spirit
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0 posted 2007-10-23 08:56 PM



Should I ramble now,
     or hold these thoughts
here inside
where they rest,   residing
in dormant places;
or let them flow

from pen to paper?

Dormant, my visions
have been for so long

        locked within

but unknown to me
as to reasons of why.

The silence in the air
        lingers so,
although all that surrounds
is turned up as loud
as it can possibly go

but still....

the quiet is found within

   {and what will be, will be...}

I had begged,
I had pleaded

          but tonight?

Tonight, I did not ask,
no, I nary even gave thought
to the writing of words

the voice of inner
steadily increased in volume
until all other sounds
were diminished into
a distant back round,

and I, though being aware
of their existence
no longer acknowledged them.

This prevailing need
took precedence
to a moment seemingly
predetermined,
no longer to be repressed....

days having passed,
    a muse in isolation,
enduring this separation
of thoughts,    no longer flowing.

      {Sweet release would be welcome}

The mind says,
the pen
       can not,

will not write,

but my soul screams    you must....

        You must....

Today, I did not think to write,
but the need told me

that it was time....

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Artic Wind
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Realm of Supernatural
1 posted 2007-10-23 09:16 PM


GentilSpirit-

i really was into the writting, very unique

ARCTIC WIND

illusiveangel
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since 2007-10-22
Posts 72
Liverpool, UK
2 posted 2007-10-24 12:04 PM


Hi Gentle...
Oh i could so relate to this, the stuff about the soul screaming.....such emotion reflected back in your words and truly very sad but very nicely penned.

Illusive xxx

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
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Eternity
3 posted 2007-10-24 01:50 PM


Powerful introspection and release ...

The inner screaming found its way on to the paper.

Love,
Margherita

The Lady
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since 2005-12-26
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The Southwest
4 posted 2007-10-25 12:56 PM




"Today, I did not think to write,
but the need told me

that it was time...."

and that's when we write best gentle Donna
when the need is upon us

love this

hugs

latearrival
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since 2003-03-21
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Florida
5 posted 2007-10-25 01:09 AM


excellent."late"
Susan Caldwell
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6 posted 2007-10-25 12:39 PM


"The mind says,
the pen
       can not,

will not write,

but my soul screams    you must....

        You must...."


It's a release when it comes...and when it doesn't it's like a dark place in the mind.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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since 2000-01-29
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Sydney, Australia
7 posted 2007-10-26 06:36 AM


but my soul screams    you must....

Donna... you are a wonderful poet! I love these lines...and can relate..  Kudos my friend..  RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

suthern
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Louisiana
8 posted 2007-11-05 02:57 PM


When we insist on getting what we WANT, our words never seem to satisfy... but when the NEED is there, the words flow. *S* This is beautiful! *S*

aziza
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Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy!
9 posted 2007-11-12 07:15 PM


-- and I am so glad that you did write.  You show so much of "you" with each word, line and poem.  It's a beautiful "you" to see and share.  Thank you, GS.

A

Earth Angel
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10 posted 2007-11-12 07:37 PM


Yes, Donna, "it was time" ~ and thank goodness for this sweet release! ~ for you and for your readers!

That is one of the best "writer's block" ~ "muse has gone away" writes!

Theeeey're baaaaack!

Love to you and Ms Muse!


Linda

Sunshine
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11 posted 2007-11-12 07:56 PM


the voice of inner
steadily increased in volume
until all other sounds
were diminished into
a distant back round,

~*~

Now this...THIS is an excellent
play on words, and adds so much
to the depth of emotion, to this
very need....




Gumpy
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since 2007-11-06
Posts 143
Canada
12 posted 2007-11-15 07:47 AM


I was captivated. Very well written.
Gumpy.

iliana
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since 2003-12-05
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USA
13 posted 2007-11-15 07:57 AM


How very well I know this.  Wrote something in the prose section a couple of years ago about exactly this.  Much enjoyed your take.  *hugs*....jo
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