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Martie
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0 posted 10-23-2007 06:54 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie


Crisp around the edges
almost beautiful
like fried eggs in bacon grease
poached sea turtles
and winter grass

Strangled by the current's ember
the hose leans into the brittle claim of leaves
blown about in air of nip-tuck
cameras shutter as they flutter

Fire eats the forest ants
and snaps the smallest thing alive
'til trees are bones and sky is smoke
as branches put on flaming coats

Hold still the sky has come unglued
the wind is in me not just the air
when my hair falls in curtains
across the aching and I turn away
just not today
© Copyright 2007 Martie Odell-Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 10-23-2007 07:08 PM       View Profile for Earth Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Earth Angel's Home Page   View IP for Earth Angel

Martie, whenever I see a newscast of the devastation that the fires are wreaking in California, I have thought of you and some of our other pipsters. I hope none of your are in the paths of the infernos.

I could feel your words ~ and the pain inherent in them.


Linda
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2 posted 10-23-2007 07:15 PM       View Profile for SmartChick   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit SmartChick's Home Page   View IP for SmartChick

Awwww, this is sad. I hope you are in a safe place.
Martie
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3 posted 10-23-2007 07:19 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

I'm in a safe place...not to worry...my son is about 5 miles away from the inferno in Orange County, Lake Arrowhead where I honeymooned and Green Valley Lake, my favorite place to fish, are not so lucky.  There is smoke everywhere.  Thanks for your thoughts.  
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4 posted 10-23-2007 07:28 PM       View Profile for secondhanddreampoet   Email secondhanddreampoet   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for secondhanddreampoet

powerful and (obviously) timely 'write!'

[a fine 'impressionistic' synopsis of a
  very sad reality...via 'global warming,'
  these kinds of circumstances will only
  ultimately increase in frequency and
  devastative intensity; etc.]

serious applause!
lucky
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Nice to see you sis... and I'm glad
to hear your in a safer neck of the
woods.

lucky Dale
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Sometimes, the quiet pain is the most intense.

Hugs
Margherita
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7 posted 10-24-2007 01:32 PM       View Profile for Margherita   Email Margherita   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Margherita

Good to know you are safe, dear Martie.

How intense your poetic description of this deplorable event!

Love and hugs.
Margherita
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8 posted 10-24-2007 02:18 PM       View Profile for Paul Wilson   Email Paul Wilson   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Paul Wilson

Martie...Tender write.

I offer tender prayers of hope to all those affected by these fires.
You know I love California and can't help but feel helpless in this situation...Paul

~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~
Paul

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9 posted 10-24-2007 02:58 PM       View Profile for icebox   Email icebox   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for icebox

Perfectly Poetic as always.  

I have been worried about you.

I am glad to see that you are OK!

Be safe my friend.

Don't worry about me; I am just as perc-y as can be.



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10 posted 10-24-2007 04:10 PM       View Profile for Artic Wind   Email Artic Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Artic Wind

horrible fire !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

but strong words descriptive words

ARCTIC WIND
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11 posted 10-24-2007 05:34 PM       View Profile for Gentle Spirit   Email Gentle Spirit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Gentle Spirit

Martie, so glad you are doing ok out there.  One of my friends daughter lives in that area, they have left once and come back...so far, safe...

Prayers to all out there, and thanking the Lord that our lil flower gal is safe...hugs.
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That's how I am here today -- crispy eyes and black soot boogers.....and hot-hot, but the sun looks like a pumpkin in the sky.

~~(¸¸¸¸ºº>   ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº>  ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº>    ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº>
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13 posted 10-24-2007 07:42 PM       View Profile for nevermore93   Email nevermore93   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for nevermore93

great poem. very good.

(im a new member here, and i if anyone has the chance pls read my poem. its under the topic title a poem of love and loss
Xillus_Xavier
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14 posted 10-24-2007 09:39 PM       View Profile for Xillus_Xavier   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Xillus_Xavier's Home Page   View IP for Xillus_Xavier

What's going on there is terrible.
Great poem though.
The Lady
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"Hold still the sky has come unglued"

a slow deep ache here Martie

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16 posted 10-25-2007 06:59 PM       View Profile for Midnitesun   Email Midnitesun   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Midnitesun

Oh Martie, I am so concerned about you and all my family/friends in CA! I hope things will settle down, and the Santa Ana winds will cease for this fall...though I know they tend to kick up around Halloween, making the coastline warm, and all the woooded areas a virtual tinderbox.
Keep that hose handy, and masks to filter the air. My thoughts are with all of you, in my birth state!
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17 posted 10-26-2007 02:47 PM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

I can't even imagine the loss you are all feeling down there, and I am glad it is finally under some control.  Stay safe, and make sure you have good masks to combat the air pollution Martie.

You wrote the pain of California well - too well.
Kit McCallum
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Martie ... you can make me speechless sometimes. A wonderful write ... truly. I love what you do to words.

Best wishes and big hugs,
/Kit
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i'm just a teen and all i have to say is wow that was put together so perfect.
nevermore93
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great poem. amazingly put together.

i would appreciate it to hear some thoughts on my new poems " resurrected" and "shadow"
which are both currently in the teen potry forum.
LindsayP
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Martie I really feel for you dear lady and

wish you a safe haven from those devastating fires. Here in Australia we suffer terrible bush fires as well, although perhaps not as bad as you are suffering this year. Good luck.

Lindsay
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wonderful poem.. I will have good thoughts for your safety Marty... RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

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23 posted 10-28-2007 12:24 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

MartieSis~

The fires have been too, too close to loved ones for comfort~

My sister said she cried and the tears left trails in the soot on her face~

I pray it ends soon ... so many are suffering tremendous losses~

Love you Sis~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

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24 posted 10-28-2007 01:37 PM       View Profile for Magnus   Email Magnus   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Magnus

Dear One,  it is wonderful to know that you
are well, safe and not breathing tooooo much
of the smoke....All of it is a tragedy, such
a painful scene.  Thankful that there have
not been too many casualties....

Hugs Party Marti.....
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