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Susan Caldwell
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0 posted 2007-10-22 02:09 PM



My hands look old, how could this be me?
I walk through my house, translucent
A ghost in a place maybe I shouldn’t be

My eyes burn and I really don’t understand why
I feel little except the empty of disillusion
I see nothing save the cold breath of my own disheartened sigh

It’s hard to imagine that I am essentially where I was before
Different actors, familiar circumstance
There is little connection other than the narcissistic core

I fail to see the difference between the hurt and hurter
Between the inflictor and the inflicted
We all seem to be drowning in the same emotional murder

Passing through each other in soulless commute
Never touching, never seeing ourselves
Weighted with disheveled thoughts, it’s a fatalistic pursuit

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

© Copyright 2007 Susan Caldwell - All Rights Reserved
Margherita
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1 posted 2007-10-22 02:41 PM


Dear Susan,
it's hard to conjugate your beautiful happy smile with this intensely sad poem. It's good to have you here again and I wish you to be serene.

As all of your offerings, this too is a great write, and very poignant too.

Love and hugs.
Margherita

Artic Wind
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2 posted 2007-10-22 03:40 PM


''My hands look old, how could this be me?
I walk through my house, translucent
A ghost in a place maybe I shouldn’t be''

really enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

inkedgoddess
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3 posted 2007-10-22 05:28 PM


feels like a puncture wound without any novacaine to absorb some of the pain
feeling this dire pain here deeply
damn sad piece, susan, but done real well

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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4 posted 2007-10-22 06:27 PM


Susan... very sad write...  I hope you are well... sending some of my special hugs to smile your day ahead   RDB x

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

illusiveangel
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5 posted 2007-10-22 06:41 PM


Hi Susan,
This really struck a nerve with me. I could almost feel the pain within the words.....beautifully sad.

x

Gentle Spirit
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6 posted 2007-10-22 07:03 PM


  I don't have the words, so I will just send hugs....lots of them...

I ache with you...

Mysteria
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7 posted 2007-10-22 10:11 PM


Life sucks sometimes!
SmartChick
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8 posted 2007-10-22 10:38 PM


I know what you mean. I agree with Mysteria. Life does indeed suck, sometims. Here's a for you. Hang in there!
icebox
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9 posted 2007-10-23 05:07 AM


Mysteria said it all...you said it best.

I hope things get better for you soon.



Susan Caldwell
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10 posted 2007-10-23 07:34 AM


Thank you all.

and I am fine

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

vandana
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11 posted 2007-10-23 06:01 PM


good read
Earth Angel
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12 posted 2007-10-23 06:58 PM


Hi, Susan! I was relieved to learn from one of your responses, that you are "fine". ~ because you certainly didn't sound fine in this poem! You must have dug deep to pull these emotions up and write so convincingly of them.

Giving you a warm hug,

Linda

secondhanddreampoet
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13 posted 2007-10-23 07:51 PM


very intense, powerful, emotive 'write'!...
simply excellent!!

serious, long-sustained applause!!

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