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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 10-22-2007 06:40 AM       View Profile for Dark Stranger   Email Dark Stranger   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Dark Stranger

I would be silly to consider
that you would be considering
stating for the record here or there
that you were feeling silly
to consider that I might be

but then there are always dreams
that drive reckless along curves
and volunteer to crash and burn
if they are allowed to drown after
in some willingly apathetic ocean

some enemy of love is guilty
of designing weekends and miles
and other men's hands on handles
that open doorway smiles
nonchalantly occasional

when my own are folded in prayer
to a plastic bag filled with sand
where you walked barefoot on friday
with your back to my oblivion
before turning around with a smile

and calling me your screen savor
__________

daark
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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1 posted 10-22-2007 06:52 AM       View Profile for Roniece Dawson-Bruce   Email Roniece Dawson-Bruce   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Roniece Dawson-Bruce

oh Mr Daark... can you be my screen savor?  I do like this!   RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........
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with you


2 posted 10-22-2007 08:49 AM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

wow....this packs a punch...and then some...
Margherita
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3 posted 10-22-2007 09:45 AM       View Profile for Margherita   Email Margherita   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Margherita

Incredibly intense write ... makes me pause to take it in in all its powerful poetic beauty.

Bow.

Love,
Margherita
Martie
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4 posted 10-22-2007 12:26 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

DS

"when my own are folded in prayer
to a plastic bag filled with sand"

You've touched me with this.
Artic Wind
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Realm of Supernatural


5 posted 10-22-2007 03:38 PM       View Profile for Artic Wind   Email Artic Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Artic Wind

i love the title
and the poem

ARCTIC WIND
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6 posted 10-22-2007 04:36 PM       View Profile for Gentle Spirit   Email Gentle Spirit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Gentle Spirit

but then there are always dreams
that drive reckless along curves
and volunteer to crash and burn
if they are allowed to drown after
in some willingly apathetic ocean

some enemy of love is guilty
of designing weekends and miles
and other men's hands on handles
that open doorway smiles
nonchalantly occasional


gotta love them dreams babe..
Dark Stranger
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7 posted 10-22-2007 05:30 PM       View Profile for Dark Stranger   Email Dark Stranger   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Stranger

you folks just bless me with your comments..thanks to each of you..am so pleased that this made you feel something special

The Lady
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8 posted 10-23-2007 04:02 PM       View Profile for The Lady   Email The Lady   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for The Lady



"and other men's hands on handles"

hmmmm...
lovely indeed stranger darlin'

vandana
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9 posted 10-23-2007 05:59 PM       View Profile for vandana   Email vandana   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for vandana

good read
Earl Brinkman
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10 posted 10-13-2010 05:59 AM       View Profile for Earl Brinkman   Email Earl Brinkman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Earl Brinkman

Those second and third stanzas are not be moseyed with too easily.  But they are effective, too effective.
s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
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Agat, Guam


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I like this. Strangely, it paints a familiar picture in my mind, but its kind of a blur..perhaps something I've forgot.
Its lovely.

-Trina.

There are places in the heart that do not yet exist; suffering has to enter in for them to come to be - LeonBloy

Dark Stranger
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12 posted 10-13-2010 06:33 AM       View Profile for Dark Stranger   Email Dark Stranger   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Stranger

eb, thanks amigo, I appreciate your reviews.


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ms sinfull..thank you for your reads
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