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Fairplay
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0 posted 2007-10-20 04:52 PM


Communication changed our wars
Old Generals would be lost
Tactics all but “Out the Door”
The public know the cost
There is no place of hiding
Now subterfuge is rife
The enemy now a virus
Terrorism part of Life
Media plays a vital role
Manipulated for wealth
The truths are buried deep
In politician Stealth
Eric

[This message has been edited by Fairplay (10-21-2007 02:55 PM).]

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Kethry
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
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Victoria Australia
1 posted 2007-10-20 08:29 PM


Eric,
I like this it has a good rhythm and flow and the message is appropriate. The only part that jars at all is the repetition of rife. Good work.

a good commitee can decimate communication.

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27
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Realms of Light
2 posted 2007-10-20 09:13 PM


Yep, war nowadays is a whole new ball game, so to speak.

The Stealth Fighter is one mean looking flying flying machine! It looks like one that Darth Vadar should fly! lol


EA

Fairplay
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3 posted 2007-10-21 02:58 PM


Thanks for the comments and advice, I have made a little change......

Eric

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