navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #41 » In my Time Of Dying
Open Poetry #41
Post A Reply Post New Topic In my Time Of Dying Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
Kalle
Member
since 2007-10-15
Posts 89
Finland

0 posted 2007-10-18 06:01 AM


Being alive is being exposed to Hunger, Humiliation and Pain in more than one form.

All of these are Interrelated.

In losing grip of our mental Modus Operandi we lose grip of Physical reality.

A situation from the Journal of a Man out of his surroundings:

There is young Man, Serving clients or doing shopping, interacting either as a customer or as a tradesman. (With a Female)

He is Blessed with good looks in accordance to these events: A Handsome young Man had Sex with Beautiful Young Woman that led Her To conceive.

He is sunken to his inner doubts and does not notice the flirt.

Accordingly the girl treats her coldly from this point.

Our young man doesn`t know what he has done wrong to receive a treatment reserved for assailants.

This depresses him more.

The look on his face makes it aware to everyone that he is surrounded by that dreadful silence of an utterly lonely creature.

There is ugly Death and Beautiful Dying.

The soul Never Dies, It remembers everything.

Every one of us owns their lives for the breathing of a Sentient Universe.

There is no Death.

© Copyright 2007 Kalle Kaunisto - All Rights Reserved
Roniece Dawson-Bruce
Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia
1 posted 2007-10-18 06:56 AM


The soul Never Dies, It remembers everything.

I think this is true.. nicely expressed.. RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Midnitesun
Deputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Empyrean
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647
Gaia
2 posted 2007-10-18 07:15 AM


well said, poet!
Gaia nods her head.

Mike Montana
New Member
since 2007-10-17
Posts 8
Maryland
3 posted 2007-10-18 07:18 AM


I believe this poem was more of narrative poetry and it was open form. I believe this poem had good storyline behind it which is very interesting. I must say this poem is different in it's own way. Overall this was a good poem..
Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #41 » In my Time Of Dying

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary