navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #41 » Urban Trees
Open Poetry #41
Post A Reply Post New Topic Urban Trees Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
RMW
Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424


0 posted 2007-10-10 03:49 PM


Urban Trees

They hold themselves apart,
each meticulously sufficient,
unlike the transients in the park blocks
that curl up beneath them.

The homeless, for their part, seem non-descript,
a sort of soft pavement
that drifts rather than ambulates.
The poet might see fog,
grey, sea-like in the way their mass swells
seasonally.
But that doesn't tell it. Bad breath
I should think. Yes, that does it.
One, large case
of visible halitosis.

RMW


© Copyright 2007 RMW - All Rights Reserved
Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural
1 posted 2007-10-10 04:01 PM


artistic!

ARCTIC WIND

Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
2 posted 2007-10-10 10:37 PM


You've described the decades of the
lost so well, Sir...

they are our oaks, our walnut trees
of wisdom, our ancients of root...

and some rot.

It is well, and understood...
and should be passed along.

Submit, submit...
and let them cry aloud.


Bobby Jordan
Member
since 2007-08-13
Posts 491
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
3 posted 2007-10-10 11:24 PM


Soft pavement HUH??

CRAP--I'm out of here.

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa
4 posted 2007-10-11 01:15 AM


Oh, I love this!  Such a perfect impressionistic painting of art and reality and understanding, swirling into each other!

- Owl

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200
Between the Lines
5 posted 2007-10-11 07:04 AM


The poet might see fog,
grey, sea-like in the way their mass swells
seasonally.
But that doesn't tell it....


always enjoy the way you see/sea life~~

M

RMW
Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424

6 posted 2007-10-11 09:41 AM


Artic Wind ... Thank you.

Sunshine ... Thank you. Your words are always welcome.

Bobby ... "Soft pavement." You might be right. Not very clear, is it? Thank you for the comments.

Owl ... Smiling, while resisting the obvious ..."Whooooo are you?". Thank you.

M ... "Sea / sea." Thank you, M.

Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
7 posted 2007-10-11 04:34 PM


Love to come back to read responses.

Heh.

Soft pavement, exactly.

That's why my M-I-Love always says she
"falls softly"...






Interloper
Deputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369
Deep in the heart
8 posted 2007-10-12 11:35 AM


You always did have a way with words

Poet, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

vandana
Deputy Moderator 5 Tours
Member Patricius
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463
USA
9 posted 2007-10-12 12:30 PM


good read
Corinne
Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167
state of confusion
10 posted 2007-10-14 10:33 PM


Bob,

You paint this bleak picture so well, it's quite poignant.

Loved

...a sort of soft pavement
that drifts rather than ambulates...


Corinne

RMW
Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424

11 posted 2007-10-15 09:51 AM


Interloper, Vandana, and Corinne .... Thank you all for taking a moment to read and share.  Bob
Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348
Florida
12 posted 2007-10-15 10:36 AM


Very nice to see you.

real nice to read you.  

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

vandana
Deputy Moderator 5 Tours
Member Patricius
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463
USA
13 posted 2007-10-15 12:09 PM


good read
Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #41 » Urban Trees

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary