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moondogz
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since 2007-05-01

Posts 397
Great White North

0 posted 2007-10-03 05:59 PM

Eating Crow

One morning, I went to the front door
to fetch the mail.

Standing there looking back at me,
was a crow with no tail.

Well, not exactly no tail,
but more like a stump.

When he tried to fly,
he could only jump.

And not very far, more like a hop.
So when he tried to hop, up onto the rail,
he didn't get far 'cause he had no tail.

When I opened the door, to give him an assist,
he let out a cry as if to resist.

That brought his mumsie, who cawed really loud,
so I closed the door, lest I attract a crowd.

I thought to myself "he'll never fly,
why he's much too young, to even try."

Then he walked to the curb, to cross the street.
Too young to fly, he had to rely on his feet.

The very next day, he was back for more.
If the black cat sees him, he'll be gone for sure.

Then he disappeared, for about a week.
Returned with tail feathers, long and sleek.

Jumped up onto the metal rail,
spread his wings, and then did sail.

Up, up and beyond the rooftop,
born to fly, and not to hop.

[This message has been edited by moondogz (10-04-2007 11:59 AM).]

Saunni
Senior Member

since 2000-07-11

Posts 1777
West Virginia

1 posted 2007-10-04 01:21 AM

Awe!! Awe, I am so glad he made it! Great write! Sauni

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Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

2 posted 2007-10-04 01:55 AM

Well, I worried about that darn crow from the beginning to the end of your poem, A tribute to your writing skill, I'm sure.
Ida

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

3 posted 2007-10-04 09:09 AM

Oh, I was so relieved that this story had a happy ending! I was fearful that he might have gotten eaten by the cat or hit by a car while attempting to cross the road!

You have observant eyes ~ and a tender heart.

Up, up, and away!

EA

moondogz
Member

since 2007-05-01

Posts 397
Great White North

4 posted 2007-10-04 11:02 AM

Thanks you Saunni, Ida and Earth Angel for your kind comments. Nothing could be better than to know that someone enjoys ones poetry.

moon.

T.Cooper
Junior Member

since 2007-11-11

Posts 16
Indiana, US

5 posted 2007-11-12 01:15 AM

aha! I love your style, it's very unique, well in the sense that I personally have not seen the likes of it

moondogz
Member

since 2007-05-01

Posts 397
Great White North

6 posted 2007-11-12 02:03 AM

Thanks T.Cooper, funny thing is that's the one and only time I ever used that style. Check out "The Element of Time" poem on this site...I thought it was so good and it flew beneath the radar unfortunately.

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

7 posted 2007-11-12 09:29 AM

this made me smile...

moondogz
Member

since 2007-05-01

Posts 397
Great White North

8 posted 2007-11-12 09:59 AM

Thanks Sea.

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

9 posted 2007-11-12 12:26 PM

Oh, I was so happy to read the last lines. Thank you for sharing this beautiful story, which also reminds us that we can realize anything if we persist and trust ourselves.

Very nice.

Love,
Margherita

fromme2U
Member

since 2007-11-09

Posts 257

10 posted 2007-11-13 06:41 PM

This was great poem..love your work

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

11 posted 2007-11-13 06:45 PM

Up, up and beyond the rooftop,
born to fly, and not to hop."

That is so true lol

ARCTIC WIND

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