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Martie

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California

0 posted 2007-09-27 07:19 PM

History Lesson

The terrible rain
clattering on tin roofs
awakens the barn door
holding in its museum of air

Thunder trembles
opening a slant of light
onto the forgotten hoof beats
that long ago galloped across the meadows
of the stolen tortured countryside

In the rafters
time hides
in an abandoned thread of lace
laconic and agreeable
in the serene dust
almost indeed noble

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

1 posted 2007-09-27 11:01 PM

I'm so pleased
that I didn't fall to sleep
before opening up a dream so soft
that I may reside in, deep...

Marchmadness
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So. El Monte, California

2 posted 2007-09-28 01:15 AM

Lovely poem, Martie.
Ida

JamesMichael
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

3 posted 2007-09-28 05:16 AM

Wonderful...James

Kahlil
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4 posted 2007-09-28 08:55 AM

I could hear the door creak,
and I could smell the dust.
I always enjoy your expressive writing.

PoppaLoco
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since 2007-09-23

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EU, NL, Limburg

5 posted 2007-09-28 11:08 AM

Made me look around and wonder about the nature of things. Beautiful imagery.
Pops

vandana

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USA

6 posted 2007-09-28 11:27 AM

nice read

Ratleader

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7 posted 2007-09-28 11:37 PM

History lesson, poetry lesson....both rolled into one. There's a flame in you, Martie, and it shines out brightest through the lines of your poetry.

I'm glad you wrote this, and that you shared it.

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OwlSA
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Durban, South Africa

8 posted 2007-09-29 02:22 AM

The tears are rolling down my cheeks for multiple reasons. Martie, this perfect poem is soooooo you in all its beauty; compassion; reality; artistic, emotive and informative detail; and every word being le mot juste. Thank you for it all.

- Owl

ThisDiamond
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Michigan, USA

9 posted 2007-09-30 04:18 PM

..."In the rafters
time hides
in an abandoned thread of lace
laconic and agreeable
in the serene dust
almost indeed noble"

So many times, I am stunned by your words Marti...and this was breathtaking.
TD

Magnus

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South Carolina, USA

10 posted 2007-09-30 04:21 PM

Your words always amaze me....quite a gal
and quite a poet.

Margherita
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Eternity

11 posted 2007-10-10 01:51 PM

quote:
In the rafters
time hides
in an abandoned thread of lace
laconic and agreeable
in the serene dust
almost indeed noble

Hauntingly beautiful, dear Martie!!

I had read this before, when I could not reply. It well deserves another round.

Love and hugs, beautiful poetess.

Margherita

TinaTrivett
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12 posted 2007-10-10 01:56 PM

I'm so glad I peeked in here. Your words are so visual. I could clearly see everything...and smell the stale museum air.

Interloper

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Deep in the heart

13 posted 2007-10-12 11:46 AM

1derful

Poet, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

vandana

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USA

14 posted 2007-10-12 12:30 PM

good read

secondhanddreampoet
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15 posted 2007-10-12 05:15 PM

most interesting 'write'!

[guess I missed it somehow the first time it
topped the 'P.I.P.-land' queue?!...sorry!]

Applause!

The Lady
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since 2005-12-26

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The Southwest

16 posted 2007-10-12 09:29 PM

"In the rafters
time hides
in an abandoned thread of lace"

skillfully woven Martie
vintage you

LindsayP
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since 2007-07-28

Posts 3410
Australia, Victoria

17 posted 2007-10-12 10:59 PM

You wrote it well Martie, much enjoyed.

Lindsay

Corinne
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state of confusion

18 posted 2007-10-14 10:35 PM

Martie,

This is stunning work! Each line carries the weight of sadness with it.

Excellent!

Corinne

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Ohio, USA

19 posted 2007-10-16 08:01 AM

yep - you did it again - a greAt poem - no surprise to me though - loved it Martie - Paul

Robert Frazier
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20 posted 2007-10-16 11:23 AM

I love this! Am reminded that the past is all around and even tucked away in the "rafters". Powerful write!

Robert

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