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Open Poetry #41

I'm Here Without You, But There With You

A Beautiful Disaster
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since 2007-01-13

Posts 409

0 posted 2007-09-23 11:12 AM

I'm Here Without You, But There With You

I'm walking on a razorblade,
Each movement brings me pain.
Some day
I'll reach the edge,
I'll make one fatal step
And fall into eternity.
I'm just one step away
From you.
Eternity knows no bounds.
No time, no waiting... Now
Each heartfret and each sound
Reminds of you.

I'm falling apart,
You're trials away,
My eyes are cried out
With what I can't say.
You're here in my arms
Until I'm awake,
You're here in my heart,
For always and safe.
You're safe.

You're walking on a razorblade,
Each movement brings you pain.
Some day
You'll reach the edge,
You'll make one fatal step
And fall into eternity.
You're just one step away
From me.
Eternity knows no bounds.
No time, no waiting... Now,
I hope, each song of love, each sound
Reminds of me.

I'm fighting for you
By living through days
Of my solitude,
Of fatal mistakes.
I'm stronger than fate,
We'll make it all through.
I'm here without you,
But there - with you.

Sekishu
Junior Member

since 2007-09-17

Posts 36

1 posted 2007-09-23 11:16 AM

This is very nice. I hope you both make it through.

secondhanddreampoet
Member Ascendant

since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

2 posted 2007-09-23 11:25 AM

very 'real' and powerfully emotive 'write'!

[I will likely never be able to 'do' fine
  'realism'...but, greatly admire those who
   can!]

applause!!

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

3 posted 2007-09-23 04:00 PM

Nice writing...I believe that there are valuable lessons to learn about love while someone you love is away...and it goes beyond missing and desperation...I am trying to learn those lessons right now as my sweetheart is away for a season...acceptance is important...James

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

4 posted 2007-09-23 04:01 PM

VERY MUCH ENJOYED
ARCTIC WIND

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

5 posted 2007-09-23 05:10 PM

Entrambi siete ad un'estremità disperata?

Enjoyed the read, but sounds hopeless.

JL

Blessed are those who are generous, because they feed the poor.
~Proverbs 22:9 NLT

A Beautiful Disaster
Member

since 2007-01-13

Posts 409

6 posted 2007-09-25 09:38 AM

Thank you!

And no, it is not hopeless

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