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WindWalker
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since 2001-10-12
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0 posted 2007-09-21 04:04 PM


I awakened alone
atop a pathless mountain
and wondered how I should go forth:

Should I gouge a road
to the green valleys below?
Should I leave a trail of rocks
to mark my passage
across flowered alpine meadows
for others to note?
Should I hack a path
deep in the dark forest
through alder and hemlock
so I could return some day
if I should so desire?

I watched the eagles soar
and realized they left no path
in wisps of cloud or blue of sky
and they were free to glide
according to the air's currents:
why not so with me?

I turned my eyes from the valleys
and looked over snow-covered crests
where the wind blows winter and summer,
and no track is long visible,
and I thought:
yes, that is the way I must go,
never leaving a mark
upon the face I walk,
my feet kissing the snow gently
then moving on;
not leaving a fading shadow
for others to find
and try to follow.
For my path is mine alone
and rolls up behind me
and all others must walk their own way,
finding pleasure in their own success,
learning from their own failures,
making their own choices:
I am not "God",
I am but a part of all that is!

© Copyright 2007 Sharran WindWalker - All Rights Reserved
ArtSolstice
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since 2007-03-18
Posts 498

1 posted 2007-09-21 07:54 PM


Well done, WindWalker! Greatly enjoyed.
secondhanddreampoet
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since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !
2 posted 2007-09-21 08:06 PM


simply superb...magical!!

[I'm rapidly running out of fitting  
  superlatives pursuant to the work
  of this grand-fine author (and, I'm
  seldom at any 'loss for words!')]

VERY serious, long-sustained applause!!

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa
3 posted 2007-09-22 02:22 AM


"Should I leave a trail of rocks
to mark my passage
across flowered alpine meadows
for others to note?"

"Rocks" could be "poetry" and you have left a passage for others to note.  

So much truth in this write!

Kethry
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since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
4 posted 2007-09-22 08:06 PM


Wind walker you are well named,I love it when nature speaks and becomes part of the story of life.

a good commitee can decimate communication.

latearrival
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since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499
Florida
5 posted 2007-09-22 08:34 PM


Wonderful thoughts, beautifully expressed and so true. Thank you. "late"
noobster
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since 2007-09-21
Posts 10

6 posted 2007-09-22 10:28 PM


"I awakened alone"

how sad, but what a nice poem



Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California
7 posted 2007-09-23 01:53 AM


Intriguing poem, Windwalker, Lots of hidden meaning. Love it.
                         Ida

A Romantic Heart
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since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496
Forever In Your Heart
8 posted 2007-09-23 01:56 AM


Very thought provoking, and deep!

~ARH

You know you're in love, when you can't fall asleep,because reality is finally better than your dream~Dr.Seuss

OwlSA
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since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa
9 posted 2007-09-23 02:13 AM


Windwalker (and how I love to say that name), I think that this is my very favourite of all your poems.  I enjoy everything you write, although I don't always agree with what you say.  However, in this one, I agree with you and applaud you for your courage, whilst doubting that I could rise to your heights in this particular part of your philosophy.  In one sense I wish that I could, but in another, I don't want to, but certainly this has been a life-changing moment for me, because I am going to remember (and gain great solace) from your viewpoint,  and will aspire to not leave a path (and/or accept that I haven't left a path), at least up to a point.  Thank you very much for this poem and its effect on me.

- Owl

secondhanddreampoet
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since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !
10 posted 2007-09-23 11:29 AM


Just had to return for another 'official visit' to this grand-fine, 'important' write!

long continuing crescendo of applause and admirational accolades!

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27
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Realms of Light
11 posted 2007-09-23 02:50 PM


WW, I LOVED this poem! Your poetry resonates with my spirit and lifts it on high!

This is a to be sure! ... SAVED

I am going back to enjoy it for the second time! This time I will read it slowly and absorb every glorious image, thought, and emotion.

Love & God's Lighted Path,

EA

Artic Wind
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since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural
12 posted 2007-09-23 03:57 PM


Very well descripited,

I would like to be where the setting takes place in.



ARCTIC WIND

PoppaLoco
Member
since 2007-09-23
Posts 83
EU, NL, Limburg
13 posted 2007-09-23 06:25 PM


There's a tale of a businessman who travelled to the Aboriginals to buy some of their art. While he waited for the black man, he picked up a stone and put it under a tree to sit in the shade. When they were done, the businessman left, and the Aboriginal picked up the stone to put it back in it's original place.

A lot of westerners always interfere, try to leave some trace, but your poetry shows the opposite wisdom. Lovely!

The Lady
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since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634
The Southwest
14 posted 2007-09-23 10:09 PM




"For my path is mine alone
and rolls up behind me
and all others must walk their own way"

wisdom WindWalker
I cannot hear this told enough

thank you


WindWalker
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since 2001-10-12
Posts 1218

15 posted 2007-09-25 02:03 AM


Thank you all for your comments!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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