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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2007-09-21 03:21 AM


Here we are and we are here.

I take the stick and dig a smile.

I hand the cross of fire to you--

and watch you dig a deeper frown.

No homilies

no platitudes

just the two of us in tune

watching fire spit the runes

of a pine cone that I tossed

just because I like the sparks

and the way woodflower wilts

and sighs like rotting flesh let loose -

rancid

in denial...truth

is waiting at the podium

in silent dignity, she takes

the cloth of blue flame as her mate

strength around her shoulder bound

she testifies:

"Now I know hate."


She placed the bead on her forehead--

the mark of widowed maidenhead:

"namaste"

prayer hands in nod

sacred

as she walked the way

of the life that led her here

like the flames that lick the night

and stay as traces of the knife

burning maps of humankind

upon our eyes and to the sky

as we look across the fire

before we look away -

before--

we recognize our selves

and stay...

wishing dark sparks of a pyre

beating loyal fists to life

upon the armor of our chests.


We hear murmers of "The Quest"

we look away when our eyes test

truth of what a widow said

as we burn her husband's head

and a pine cone sparked.


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Dark Stranger
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1 posted 2007-09-21 06:26 AM


pine cones are my brothers
and we are only children

sometimes you make me look
under your blankets ms...

I enjoyed this one

serenity blaze
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2 posted 2007-09-21 06:41 AM


hey you--

this was not a judgement, k?



We do what we have to do when we have to do it.

I really do understand that.


serenity blaze
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3 posted 2007-09-21 07:48 AM


http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=nQkcscDjJHk
Janet Marie
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4 posted 2007-09-21 06:27 PM


in silent dignity, she takes

the cloth of blue flame as her mate

strength around her shoulder bound

she testifies:

"Now I know hate."


She placed the bead on her forehead--

the mark of widowed maidenhead:

"namaste"

prayer hands in nod

sacred

as she walked the way

of the life that led her here

like the flames that lick the night

and stay as traces of the knife

burning maps of humankind

upon our eyes and to the sky

as we look across the fire

before we look away -

before--

we recognize our selves

and stay...

==========================


oh my my--and *sigh*
me thinks you engraved this one on the night lovie.........
candle dancing and cadence.... a powerful mix in your gifted hands.
(ykikyk)

Writing poetry is easy. You need only stare at a piece of blank paper until your forehead bleeds.

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Sunshine
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5 posted 2007-09-21 07:54 PM


Again, as I do now, I do not read
others' comments, because I know mine will never
tread upon them in this exclamation
of your abilities.

When you turn 50...

talk to me...and I will share with you
something you might not yet know...







and yes...the pinecones sparked memories
albeit not quite as intense
but memories just the same.




Sunshine
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6 posted 2007-09-21 08:00 PM


and NOW I watch the tube...

oh girl...

you make me dance...


secondhanddreampoet
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7 posted 2007-09-21 08:27 PM


erudite and awesomely powerful 'write'!

[as I have come to expect from this author...
  who always leaves my thoughts percussively
  dancing off in a plethora of interesting
  directions!]

v. serious applause!!

OwlSA
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8 posted 2007-09-22 11:21 AM


Karen, you have done with a few simple words, what Ian Anderson has done with Bach, and what the conductor has done with an orchestra!  Delicate, intricate, exact and extremely cleverly woven.  What a delight it always is to read you!

- Owl

serenity blaze
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9 posted 2007-09-22 11:25 PM


I've always loved owls.

Thanks all for taking the time to ponder this one--even though there is a lot of uncomfortable dark thought content.

I appreciate your kind attention, very much.

(and Jan? just...um--you know. )

I hope you know.

OwlSA
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10 posted 2007-09-24 12:24 PM


Thanks for the hug, Karen.  It was particularly well-timed.  Thanks also for loving owls (me and all other real owls).  Your understanding (in both senses of the word) of everyone and everything always has me reeling.  You say so much per word and so very well, in both your poetry and your comments, that it seems such a waste that you aren't a teacher or lecturer in English, fine arts, philosophy and/or the art of living.  If I know you well enough, the last 2 may surprise you, but they shouldn't.

- Owl

Larry C
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11 posted 2007-09-24 02:39 AM


Karen,
You part wisdom that urges one to review and ponder. But, for me, mostly you challenge. And you know I like a good challenge. 'tis nice to take comfort when you ramble. Thank you...

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane,
I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

bel1e
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12 posted 2007-09-26 09:17 AM


~~just passing through these blue pages...your poems always strike deep in the heart~~
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~Peace
~beLLe

  

Martie
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13 posted 2007-09-26 10:27 AM


Dear Karen......the sparks from a pinecone thrown into the fire, ignite your words within my heart.  They are amazing and deep, but more...lyrical.  
ameteurpoet101
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14 posted 2007-09-26 03:50 PM


Your words touches something deep within my soul you have a gift to make people "feel".
EagleScorpion
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15 posted 2007-09-29 02:28 PM


wow...    you truly are one of the great ones... and those like you are not common to say the least
serenity blaze
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16 posted 2007-09-29 08:46 PM


You guys make this place soooooooo very addictive. Thanks so much for the constant generosity and encouragement.

and just...wow.

Love and thanks to all.

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