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Over the River
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Over the River |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion 
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Over the River (Ride of the Pale Horse) Beneath a vanishing moon on a well-worn path, a white charger raises her head. She is braced for a strike, ears perked to one long note, bleak as a loon's. It begins. Another ride, the route, rote. She prefers night’s illusion. About her head floats the negative of aura, a twilight mirror. A surprised rider appears; his thighs tremble. Fear is the glint of ancient teeth from the dark glade. [This message has been edited by Corinne (09-20-2007 04:49 PM).] |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
"She prefers night’s illusion" Me, too. Nice to read you again, Corinne. Hope you are well.  M |
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ybear New Member
since 2007-09-15
Posts 6 |
there is some beautiful fairy tale imagery here and I like that the knight-character is female very much. however, I don't fully understand what the poem is about and would love to hear your take on it? |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
This is deeply intriguing and captivating! Love to see you back too! Love, Margherita |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Fear is the glint of ancient teeth... what imagery... but you never let me down.  |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you, M! Yes, I'm fine, thank you. Good to be back and thank you for the warm welcome! Ybear, Well, I'm guessing this one misses its mark if the meaning isn't quite clear. I have done a lot of editing and sometimes the meaning gets lost in the process -- you forget to go back and make sure you haven't changed too much. This is about the last ride into death. Thank you -- because it's difficult to see one's work objectively and it's like you've turned on a light. Thank you, Margherita! Thank you, Sunshine! Corinne |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Core... This was an interesting write, although I didn't get the death ride. I thought of a venomus snake strike which assumed death but only to the horse. I'm not good at interpreting these complex poems. But I'll read whatever you'll post just to try to understand the poet, mostly I seem to miss the mark. Oh well, the pleasure is in the mystery... sweet poet... Parker |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Corinne- i know people have already said this, but yes, this is a interesting Read. But, Good lol ARCTIC WIND |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you, sweet Park. I think this one has missed the mark. But that's okay; a lesson learned (hopefully) for another day! I tend to be too obscure, me thinks. Mystery is one thing; hiding behind the trees is another. Thank you, Arctic Wind! |
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