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Bronzeage
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0 posted 2007-09-11 07:53 PM


Authors note:
There were about 2000 September 11ths before the year 2001. Things often happen on any randon day of the year, which will forever color that date. Before 2001, the date meant nothing more to me than any other day. Today I discovered a significance I never before attached to it. Many years ago, September 11th fell on the Saturday after Labor Day, which was how I remembered it. When we write in the first person, it is easy for the reader to assume what they read is factual and often very current. This piece is factual with allowance for poetic licence. The place has been altered, a few details have been left out, but the feelings are real.

Summer Night

I was the boy who
came to your window late at night,
and helped you climb out
so we could go lie on a blanket
in the field behind your house.
You do remember me.
You may have me confused.
Its hard to imagine I was once
such a skinny, slobbering, clumsy boy,
who had trouble getting your jeans unzipped.
I remember your face
as the moon rose over the trees.
You were the most beautiful thing
I had ever seen in my life.
I wanted the sun to rise
so I could roll you over
and look at every part of you.
If love is measured
by how much it consumes,
I have never loved anything or anyone
as much as I loved you that night.
The only reason I left you that night
was to get you back into your bedroom
before your parents woke up
and found you missing
In a perfect world
we would still be two young lovers
locked together on a blanket lain on a grassy field
a warm summer breeze across my back
my heart beating so loud
I could barely hear you
whisper please in my ear.
Any night when I look up
and see a summer sky
with a full moon caught in a tree.
I am back on that blanket with you.
I had heard about it
I had read about it
I had imagined it a thousand times
but nothing had prepared me
for feeling of entering you for the first time.
The fire in my spine burned through my brain
and I was melted in a cauldron
and poured into you
You gasped and I knew I had hurt you
but the fire was burning
through my back where your hands held me
and all I could do was open my mouth
and incinerate us both in the flames.
I held you so tight I was afraid you would break
but I could not let go or move.
We were pressed together from our necks to our thighs,
your breasts flattened against my hairless chest.
I thought I would never move again
and be forever frozen to you
but the smell of your hair
and the sound of your breath
so close to my ear woke me from my from my sleep
I slowly pulled back
and your breath became a whimper
and again please
like a cry from a well,
far away, yet so clear in my ear
drawing me back into you.
There we were, untaught and unschooled
young lovers, who knew nothing but each other
learning each other and making it up
Me thrusting into you at the urging
of your fingers in my hair
and your mouth knawing at my ear
pleading not to stop
not to ever stop
to hold you and fill you forever.
Forever is easy when time stops
Forever is your chin clamped to my shoulder
Forever is our mouths sealed
so there is only one breath between us
Forever is your arms and legs
wrapped around me
as I pick you up off the ground
and we fall back to earth
I will never stop
I will never let go
I will cling to you like precious life
not to be shook off.
Part of me will hold you forever.
Part of you will forever be in me.
And so suddenly I burst open
and you climb inside my ribs
to hold my heart.
Oh sweet love, can you love me forever?
Can you stay inside me forever
Can I feel you hold my heart forever.


Type II poet. Its worth the work.

© Copyright 2007 Bron Zeage - All Rights Reserved
ThisDiamond
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since 2002-02-22
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1 posted 2007-09-11 10:17 PM


Intense...artfully done.
Much applause.

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
2 posted 2007-09-14 05:23 AM


Pretty nice...James
secondhanddreampoet
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since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !
3 posted 2007-09-14 01:25 PM


obviously a very real, heartfelt, personal,
emotive, and powerful 'write'!

[as likely mentioned elsewhere, I  
  cannot 'do' direct 'realism'; but
  tremendously admire those who can!]

serious, sustained applause!!

aziza
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since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995
Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy!
4 posted 2007-09-14 03:01 PM


What a wonderful piece of writing. You swept me up and took me on an emotional ride - bringing back memories.  You brought back memories.  I love how open you are in this poem - thank you for sharing with those of who choose to read.  Thank you.

A

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