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hoot_owl_rn
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0 posted 2007-09-10 10:27 PM



I Am Not Steel

I am stilled
not steel
though cold
and silent

I am soil and sand
eroded
in the wake
of your leaving

I am bones and tendons
tended now by carrion
for  I am death
in the flesh

and damn this heart
that knows no better
than to go on
beating


I am nothing special...and my name will soon be forgotten,but I've loved another with all my heart and soul,and to me,this has always been enough.~N.S

© Copyright 2007 Ruth Kephart - All Rights Reserved
Bronzeage
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1 posted 2007-09-14 12:26 PM


A well done, but sad piece.
Earth Angel
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2 posted 2007-09-14 12:47 PM


No, you are not "STEEL" ~ You are a "MAGNOLIA" ~ and should be treated with great care.

The flower may be falling off the tree at this moment in time, but a new bud will blossom and grow, dear poetess.

Loving hug,
Linda


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3 posted 2007-09-14 08:17 AM


You are the seed pods of the whipporwill, pulled out and strewn about by a cruel wind and yet you magically come together  to bloom again time after time....
Kit McCallum
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4 posted 2007-09-14 08:27 AM


What a wonderful and powerful write, Ruth ... excellent phrasing and play on words throughout.

VERY much enjoyed this! Well done!

Best wishes and hugs,
/Kit

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5 posted 2007-09-14 11:11 AM


Wonderful writing.

A

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6 posted 2007-09-14 11:35 AM


HootieGal~

WONDERFULLY WRITTEN~



*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
Email -     noles1@totcon.com   

vandana
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7 posted 2007-09-14 12:16 PM


good one
Bobby Jordan
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8 posted 2007-09-14 08:34 PM


Yo hoot_owl_rn,

Snap out of it.  

Nice write, but I hope you feel better soon.

Bobby

Tim
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9 posted 2007-09-16 02:46 PM


terse the verse
but as always well written and expressed.

Elizabeth Santos
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10 posted 2007-09-16 09:45 PM


Oh, Hoot!
What an ending!
What a great peice of writing!
Proud of you
Liz

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