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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan 
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. A frigid wind Bending branches The skittering sound Of dried leaves On the road An iron bridge The horn of a passing train A church bell’s toll The last geese On the gray horizon A wooden boat with no oars Abandoned on the shore On the oak’s trunk An old scar In the shape of a heart Cold water Over colored stones . |
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TomMark Member Elite
since 2007-07-27
Posts 2133LA,CA |
sad poem. very sad. I try not to live ahead of time because it make me getting old sooner!! This is too sad. "On the oak’s trunk An old scar In the shape of a heart" See how hot a heart can get?! it burns. Butr now, the only word with warm sense is "colored". [This message has been edited by TomMark (09-08-2007 12:56 AM).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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DennisTheMenace Member
since 2005-09-04
Posts 240 |
A friend told me to look at poems like this as a series of images. That helps me apprieate this, good images. |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
For me at least, this 'write' and others by this author constitute fine and effective Zen poetry that I can relate to on very many levels. very serious and long-sustained applause!! |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
Thank you all I try to avoid telling a story in my poems. Rather I like to let a moment look around in its mood and then let the reader decide what if any story there is. Thanks again John |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
very powerful -Juju |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
. Fair Winds Calm Seas Juju . |
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