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inkedgoddess
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0 posted 2007-09-06 09:42 PM



I tried to write today
but was flooded
in the afterthoughts
and burdened with
"what will become of this"

i tried to recreate
that almost perfect morning
in deciphering the script
the stars may come to write
or not, regarding such this
rendevous
of two, tenaceous fools like us

i could compose no single sonnet
nor revel in this song sung blue

i could not write today

stuck beneath the muddled water
not having been accustomed
to the simple bliss
as such this thing
between the two of us

it seems i'm best at words
when love entwines itself,
choking in its trenches
the prelude to its requiem

as it slowly
fades away



[This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (09-07-2007 09:13 PM).]

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Dark Stranger
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West Coast
1 posted 2007-09-07 06:28 AM


you can always write babe...and some days you are awesome..as today
Gentle Spirit
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2 posted 2007-09-07 08:58 AM


Whatever you chose to write, it always comes out awesome Mish.  Enjoyed your thoughts here hon.  

after a fall I get back up,
move on 'cause the past is the past and theres no tomorrow if remaining in still waters while the river flows on ~dsmith

JL
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since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128
Texas, USA
3 posted 2007-09-07 09:42 AM


"it seems i'm best at words
when love entwines itself,
choking in its trenches
the prelude to its requiem

as it slowly
fades away "

Now this, is perfect, just perfect.
Love this write.

JL

Blessed are those who are generous, because they feed the poor.
~Proverbs 22:9 NLT

Kahlil
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since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881

4 posted 2007-09-07 09:50 AM


This is it!
That which moves us to write.
I love to read you.

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27
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Realms of Light
5 posted 2007-09-07 10:26 AM


Goddess, I wish I "could not write" like you!!!

I find your poetry to be spell-binding.

"it seems i'm best at words
when love entwines itself,
choking in its trenches
the prelude to its requiem

as it slowly
fades away"

~ See what I mean! You are a 'poetessa goddessa'.

Loving hug,
EA

inkedgoddess
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Ohio
6 posted 2007-09-07 03:40 PM


thank you all kindly for reading and stopping by
always appreciated

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
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Eternity
7 posted 2007-09-07 08:24 PM


No needs for sonnets when words arrange themselves in such a captivating way when you let them flow freely.

Beautiful!

Love,
Margherita

Midnitesun
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Gaia
8 posted 2007-09-09 07:02 PM


damn those requiems anyway
ThisDiamond
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since 2002-02-22
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Michigan, USA
9 posted 2007-09-10 08:34 AM


Your touch to the water of thought, as potent as the sun and the moon.
Well done.

Snowflake From Hell
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since 2003-07-10
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My own little Icey Oblivion
10 posted 2007-09-10 12:44 PM


cant write? i think you were disillusioned then you wrote that very well

I am the little cracked mirror

Dull Glitter
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since 2007-09-25
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Iowa, USA
11 posted 2007-09-26 08:40 PM


Consiter this poem thoroughly enjoyed.
SmartChick
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since 2001-09-23
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On A Journey To The Unknown
12 posted 2007-09-26 08:52 PM


For someone, who could not write, you sure did great on this one.
OwlSA
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Durban, South Africa
13 posted 2007-09-29 02:57 AM


Whilst you are excellent at "songs sung blue", the same applies to you with songs sung golden, like this one!

- Owl

Ratleader
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14 posted 2007-09-29 09:38 PM


I'm going to go outside for a while now, and just...think.

I haven't written -- I mean really written -- in a long time.

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inkedgoddess
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15 posted 2007-09-30 06:17 PM


thanks for reading and being here with me

secondhanddreampoet
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a 'Universalist' !
16 posted 2007-10-02 09:44 PM


V. interesting 'write'!

GREAT ending!

serious applause!!

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