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aziza
Member Elite

since 2006-07-09

Posts 2995
Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy!

0 posted 2007-09-05 03:01 AM

Silvery strands of sleep drift just out of reach,
ever illusive, floating into the black chasm of moonless nights,
leaving behind only a collection of whispered memories.

Memories which taunt the mind’s edge with a spider touch.

Captured memories that dance among particles of day dreams,
weaving a tapestry out of threads of realism;
and braiding borders from a basket of old emotions.

Eyes gaze upon horizons forever out of reach

But, spirit, relentless and strong, pushes closed windows wide,
offering the freedom to inhale the aroma summer’s raspberries
melding with cranberries, blood-red on autumn’s bushes.

Frosted air bites at sensitive skin, licks away the taste of salt,

and beckons silken threads of memories to free-fall,
to catapult into the breeze of dawn’s early hour;
leaving behind only a breath of tomorrow’s promise.

Alison

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

1 posted 2007-09-05 05:10 AM

Wonderful...James

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

2 posted 2007-09-05 06:25 AM

ms az, and may there always be tomorrows
towhisper secrets, enjoyed it ms

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

3 posted 2007-09-05 07:51 AM

Lovely writing A, and very much enjoyed sweetie.

Kahlil
Senior Member

since 2003-04-12

Posts 1881

4 posted 2007-09-05 09:26 AM

A lovely, whispery write, softly touching
all the senses.

secondhanddreampoet
Member Ascendant

since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

5 posted 2007-09-05 06:29 PM

A most fine ‘write’!

I especially LOVE:

“Silvery strands of sleep drift just out of reach,
ever illusive, floating into the black chasm of moonless nights,
leaving behind only a collection of whispered memories…

…which taunt the mind’s edge with a spider touch.”

AND the image of:

….memories…free-fall(ing…)

leaving behind only a breath of tomorrow’s promise”

Serious, sustained applause!!

aujussy wolf

Senior Member

since 2003-08-09

Posts 1215
Michigan

6 posted 2007-09-06 12:03 PM

Eyes gaze upon horizons forever out of reach

( thats me ) wonderful writing : )

In his mantle gray he walked one day across a shining floor and with crystal key in secrecy he opened an ivory door -J.R.R. Tolkien(T.Bombadil-the adv

soul drifter
Senior Member

since 2004-09-08

Posts 711
Colorado

7 posted 2007-09-07 03:06 AM

Oh,
that's as lovely as can be.

Saving. Don't want to let it go...

"Hey, it's me, I'm dynamite and I don't know why" -- Van Morrison, 'Sweet Thing'

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

8 posted 2007-09-07 09:44 AM

Excellent!
JL

Blessed are those who are generous, because they feed the poor.
~Proverbs 22:9 NLT

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