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Leanne <3
Member

since 2007-08-25

Posts 216
N.S.W, Australia

0 posted 2007-08-25 08:36 AM

she was just off young,
but alarmingly naive.
She knew why he was here
but she didnt think to leave.

hoaxed into love
conned clear of lust
now confused beyond return,
about to break his trust.

She couldn't comprehend
everything he did to her,
his love became distorted
and her conscience formed a blur.

her happy smile,
and generous soul
gave way to his lies and games;
her innocence was stole.

He smothered her with guilt,
carrying her upon his hearse.
He said he'd never leave her,
seducing her into his curse.

Uncountable blue bruises
one blackened heart
she was the fly in his web,
tangled from the start.

She promised to never leave,
that she was his forver.
But now she wanted out,
scared by the meaning of never.

She tried to fight him,
tried so hard to explain.
But anger infected his words,
protective of his domain.

Just one more word
one last try
all she could manage,
was an impelled goodbye

Bronzeage
Member

since 2007-07-20

Posts 197

1 posted 2007-08-25 04:42 PM

Very good write, Leanne. Welcome to Pip

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

2 posted 2007-08-25 07:36 PM

Nice writing...James

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

3 posted 2007-08-26 12:23 PM

Hi, Leanne. Welcome to piptalk!

Not a very pleasant situation for her to be in! I felt your aching words right in the pit of my stomach. A very emotive and moving write!

"Uncountable blue bruises
one blackened heart
she was the fly in his web,
tangled from the start."

~ Gosh, how this aches!

"her happy smile,
and generous soul
gave way to his lies and games;
her innocence was stole."

~ Unfortunately, a far too often, scenario!

Giving you a warm, welcoming hug,

Earth Angel

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

4 posted 2007-08-26 03:53 PM

Powerful write and I agree that this happens too often, but it seems we can't learn from the experience of others.
The lesson is definitely learned in the moment of that determined "good bye".
Love,
Margherita

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