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Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa

0 posted 2007-08-22 08:17 PM


Tread softly, gentle, slow;
do not wake me please
for the harmony unleashed
on a world fast asleep
leaves the mind a-teeter so
between the truth and lies.

What of a truth too feeble
to cut malaise from mortal life
and that heavenly peace bespoken off
kept unto itself?

But sweet, sweet, harmony,
you sneak into my sleep  
and I move to the refrains
of an immortal truth
until awake I know
you’re a master of disguise
hiding so effectively
in the middle of a lie.

Now I lay me down to sleep;
tread softly, gentle, slow,
the harmony’s too deep
to hear, feel, know, the truth
when I’m not asleep!

Helen / 23 August 2007


© Copyright 2007 Helen - All Rights Reserved
Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
1 posted 2007-08-22 09:14 PM


for the harmony unleashed
on a world fast asleep
leaves the mind a-teeter so
between the truth and lies.

~*~

You've built a library of knowledge
in these four lines, m'dear.

Well done!


Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa
2 posted 2007-08-23 04:09 AM


Thanks, Sunshine!  The sun shines on South Africa so beautifully these days from a clear blue sky.  That is the best of my land at this time of year.
MoonShadow
Senior Member
since 2001-08-02
Posts 943
Dark side of the Moon.
3 posted 2007-08-23 10:06 AM


Well said, Helen.

         MoonShadow
.

JL
Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128
Texas, USA
4 posted 2007-08-23 11:06 AM


"But sweet, sweet, harmony,
you sneak into my sleep  
and I move to the refrains
of an immortal truth
until awake I know
you’re a master of disguise
hiding so effectively
in the middle of a lie.

Now I lay me down to sleep;
tread softly, gentle, slow,
the harmony’s too deep
to hear, feel, know, the truth
when I’m not asleep!"

Excellent write Honeybunch!
Love the close.

JL



XOx Uriah xOX
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since 2006-02-11
Posts 1403
Virginia
5 posted 2007-08-23 11:12 AM


::smiles::
Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa
6 posted 2007-08-23 12:48 PM


  Thanks everyone!
JamesMichael
Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
7 posted 2007-08-24 04:55 PM


Nice...James
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