implosion - inspired by a Magnus title

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suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

0 posted 2007-08-22 09:52 AM

Heart splinters and typed words blur as I read your terse little note
I cannot hear beyond the screams that roar from my silent throat

Rage and grief struggle for control with me the unwilling pawn
Mission: Destroy my sanity now that your love’s been withdrawn

What did I do? How did I fail? Why did you give no warning?
Was I so blind, did I deserve this nosedive into mourning?

Shards of dreams mutilate my skin as I crumble to the floor
No pain is greater than knowing you won’t be back any more.

Many thanks to Magnus for the inspiration his title provided this morning *S* /pip/Forum104/HTML/000721.html I came to read... and got a bit side-tracked. *S*

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

1 posted 2007-08-22 09:58 AM

I have asked myself these very same questions. Sometimes the failure does not lie within us sweet lady, sometimes it is something inside of them. I felt this, Suthern.

after a fall I get back up,
move on 'cause the past is the past and theres no tomorrow if remaining in still waters while the river flows on ~dsmith

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

2 posted 2007-08-22 05:21 PM

thanx bunches Suthern....you can write some
pretty fair lines to go into the books....
Thank you again...

[This message has been edited by Magnus (08-22-2007 06:06 PM).]

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

3 posted 2007-08-22 06:46 PM

Eight lines of pain that felt like a suckerpunch betrayal...

Hey you...

Be well. Be happy.

miscellanea
Member Elite

since 2004-06-24

Posts 4060
OH

4 posted 2007-08-22 07:02 PM

Very vivid! You express the magnitude of implosion so so well!

Take care, my suthern friend.

hugs,

misce'

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

5 posted 2007-08-24 08:23 AM

Gentle Lady: I always take the blame, though. *S* Thank you so much!!!

Magnus: Thank you, my friend... I hope you don't mind me borrowing your words. *S* My muse needed to have a fire lit under her. *G*

serenity: Could be because I've been there, done that, bought the t-shirt? LOL Thank you so much, dear lady... and... you, too. *S*

miscellanea: Thank you so much!!! You make me smile... and I appreciate the gift! *S*

luminosity
Senior Member

since 2005-11-18

Posts 813

6 posted 2007-09-26 02:36 PM

well, you must know that coming from one who has actually imploded before, my comment has to bear more weight that others...no pun intended at the stage (and weight) of life...lol...

this is AWEsome

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

7 posted 2007-10-02 04:04 PM

Suthern One ~

I hadn't seen you around for awhile so I went looking for your last post and I found this powerfully implosive write!

Magnus Poetry, can often be a source of inspire for fellow poets ~ and this, m'dear, is a fine example of where that inspiration can lead!

As I read in one of the replies that you wrote, you've been there and done that and have worn the T-shirt!

Little triggers (such as Barry's poem)can open the floodgates to a lot of emotion that we have kept bottled up inside. You emote with the best of them!

May your next T-shirt have a big happy face on it!

Love to you, Dear Belle,

Linda

Kit McCallum

Administrator

Member Laureate

since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

8 posted 2007-10-02 04:12 PM

Wow ... this packs a powerful punch Ruth! I very much enjoyed the raw feelings this explored. Really well done!

Best wishes and hugs,
/Kit

Pilgrimage
Member Elite

since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

9 posted 2007-10-02 05:07 PM

Gracious. This one made me bite my lip--the rhyme adds to the feeling. The picture is painted in strong colors.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

10 posted 2007-10-02 05:17 PM

Nice...James

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

11 posted 2007-10-02 05:40 PM

I too am a member of the T-shirt club. powerfully done I could feel the implosion.

a good commitee can decimate communication.

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

12 posted 2007-10-02 06:29 PM

Wow, one word, powerful!!!!

Intensely written and so descriptive...remind me to never come near you when your playing with dynomite...LOL

big hugs for a well thought out poem....

Lee J.

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

13 posted 2007-11-05 02:05 PM

luminosity, EA, Kit, Pilgrimage, Kethry and LeeJ: Thank you so much, ladies... I am truly grateful for your responses and hope you'll forgive me the delay in saying so. *S*

JamesM: Thank you so much! *S*

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