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Dark Stranger
Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast

0 posted 2007-08-22 06:31 AM




I will always use your foot in my mind
to tiptoe into our ocean
the one we invented together

one honorable evening
when everything was perfect
even down to the scars of after

we put on the look back shoes now
to dance around on the metal
with our eyes closed to listen

to our own musical sounds
wondering if they would still stir
our fluids to boiling

if we came in out of our own rains


daark

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bel1e
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since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631

1 posted 2007-08-22 06:42 AM


~what a lovely rain dance, this~

  

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
2 posted 2007-08-22 07:29 AM


Nice writing...James
SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676
with you
3 posted 2007-08-22 08:49 AM


good grief mister....you made my eyes sting with this....
LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296

4 posted 2007-08-22 08:55 AM


to our own musical sounds
wondering if they would still stir
our fluids to boiling

if we came in out of our own rains


unique in your own right...
and the graphics leave a soul
to ponder wisely now


Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989

5 posted 2007-08-23 07:27 AM


  This is big daddy lovely.
Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa
6 posted 2007-08-23 08:02 AM


Wonderful write!  

"if we came in out of our own rains"

Well said!  Sometimes people don't know that they actually can move.

aziza
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since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995
Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy!
7 posted 2007-08-23 11:16 AM


:: smiles ::

Mornin'

I do love how you start my day.

A

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348
Florida
8 posted 2007-08-23 12:19 PM


yes.

it does.

Very nice memories Mr. D.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

Angel4aKing
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since 2006-09-27
Posts 1372
USA
9 posted 2007-08-23 03:01 PM


Just BEAUTIFUL.....

~~~kingsangel~~~

Krishankins
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Texas
10 posted 2007-08-23 08:18 PM


Makes me think of two people that have loved for a long time.
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