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A Beautiful Disaster Member
since 2007-01-13
Posts 409 |
This writing is about all my love life - memories, feelings, impressions, both the past and the present. The four parts are dedicated to four different people, hence the title, and all the parts are written in such a way that all those people would easily guess which part is for them. The unusual structure also has a particular meaning, especially the fourth part being different. It may seem weird... but hope you like it. Dedications 1. You're now just a memory, But the memory, more precious Than any guise from a loner's dream. I'll never hear your voice calling out my name, I'll never catch the glance of your charming eyes, Parting with you with no chance to say goodbye, I knew you'd stay here - in my heart For all my life, but remaining Forever young and loved. 2. I know that you loved me then, Sincerely - you could never lie, For being your shield and your saviour, Severely defeated in the very last strife For you. Broken, tortured, I failed you When my desperate last goodbye Was the hymn of "eternal" love. 3. You were the worst of my mistakes, The sweetest of my scary nightmares, The mirror, revealing my dreams as fears. The stupid thing - 'have done that, been there' Was everything that ever was between us. The key I gave you as if "from heart" Just didn't fit it... Oh, despair! 4. The spark of one November's night Has grown into the flame of endless hope. Two lives, two sorrows are my one - real - life, And of this new life was that night, so calm, the dawn, As all the tears, hours, miles, lost letters I've been counting... And longing, parting, waiting... But for this all would I have even found you? |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Loved this glimpse into your loves and losses. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
This is very intriguing, maybe more to the point fascinating. Four pieces of your life’s puzzle, and each piece’s relevance reflects dependence on someone else’s life to complete your own. Brings to mind a few questions: What is the time between each dedication? How and why did number 1 of your dedication end as it did? Why so much trouble in the days of dedications 2 through 4? Very intriguing, delightful insight, but short on depth, and makes the reader wanting more, and speculating. Not critical just very curious why this type of format. JL  |
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TomMark Member Elite
since 2007-07-27
Posts 2133LA,CA |
oh, life just can be like this. Painful experience..in the journey of love. enjoyed the read. Tomtoo |
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A Beautiful Disaster Member
since 2007-01-13
Posts 409 |
Thanks a lot to everyone who responded! Especially for JL: The difficulties described are the difficulties of long-distance relations. 1 was my first love. We were not meant to be together, so this story ended, having just begun. The second love story was the longest and a very beautiful one, but destiny brought us apart, and now I'm really thankful for that. Those relations - to some extent - were a burden. 3 was the person I 'dated', being in love with 4. See - all the three stories came to the end, and it is shown through the format - the last line is as long as the first one - it came to where it began from. 4 is the person I've loved for a year and a half, he means more than the world to me. And the format is different - each line is longer than the previous one - it means I'm getting more and more attached with every day. |
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