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ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

0 posted 2007-08-16 11:01 PM



Every Syllable

Hard and fast
The weakened knees of once perhaps
Twisted round my tongue

Back and forth
Decision pumps its legs
Each round, lay down upon the wind

Like winter in its sigh of ice
Boiling in August steam
Harsh upon the linen that I dream

Back and forth
Catapulting into unknown sound
Losing altitude for where I’m bound

Dinnertime abandons me
Creek of links freeze doggedly
Time must come at sundown

Slow, to stop
These shades of sullen silhouette
For, square boxes won’t relent

That gangling shoelace view
A strategy to see without looking through
But what’s a little dirt between friends

Toted bandages for the see saw
Sure a kiss in every syllable
Lest I bleed into the sand
...Of what migrates beneath


Copyright Kkh 8/16/07

© Copyright 2007 Kathleen Harris - All Rights Reserved
JL
Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128
Texas, USA
1 posted 2007-08-16 11:33 PM


I love the structure of this: meter and rhyme.
A bit confusing for my feeble mind;
but it sounds like someone was spending
too much time
at the playground...


JL


Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989

2 posted 2007-08-17 08:10 AM


I very much enjoyed this and the cadence was delightful to read.  Nicely done.
WindWalker
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3 posted 2007-08-21 12:17 PM


I really like this one!!!!!
Magnus
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4 posted 2007-08-21 08:47 PM


really nice K... Keep going,  you are doing
very nicely...

Kahlil
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5 posted 2007-08-21 09:13 PM


Were we on the swings???
I love that!

SmartChick
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since 2001-09-23
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6 posted 2007-08-21 10:00 PM


Wow! This is wonderful! It was a delight to read.
The Lady
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since 2005-12-26
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7 posted 2007-08-23 10:40 PM




"Back and forth
Decision pumps its legs"

love it TD!


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