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kasey191
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0 posted 2007-08-16 09:03 AM


Well ive been here before
You know that
But you never knew why
Or understood how
Lets say its revision
For the sake of peace
But we know the truth
I call this the pit
Where everything dies
And hope turns to dust
And theres no way out
Till you take this back
The words you spoke
Without knowing my truth
You took for granted
That I really don’t care
Now lets be honest
This isn’t love
Just a constant need
For company
For a feeling of place
Found in your arms
Though we both will deny it
It was fleeting romance
But ill punish myself
Till my last breathe
By loving no one
So you can see
That you were the one
I wanted to love
You were the one
That I could never have
And ill constantly know
How you escaped
How I let you go
Always i'll know
This way I can
Make my pain eternal
I need to be searching
To have my purpose
As sick as it is
Im happy in misery
And I cant do it
without you
& this heartless soul
will rise again
but she wont love
or stay for long
because back in the pits,
is where she belongs


© Copyright 2007 Kasey Daye - All Rights Reserved
Gentle Spirit
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1 posted 2007-08-16 09:05 AM


Powerful and emotive writing here.  Feeling this.... nicely written.
Cpat Hair
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2 posted 2007-08-16 09:06 AM


an interesting progression... tied neatly at the end with what would squash the last light of hope....


kasey191
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3 posted 2007-08-16 09:16 AM


Thank you
nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
4 posted 2007-08-16 09:20 AM


to me this was one long breath of hopelessness...but  maybe because that's how I'm feeling today~~


enjoyed ~
M

kasey191
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5 posted 2007-08-16 09:22 AM


You could say that,it's the day im having as well, hence the poem
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Gaia
6 posted 2007-08-16 11:14 AM


Understanding this, yet remembering when the day DID take a turn away from hopelessness.
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7 posted 2007-08-16 12:30 PM


enjoyed
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