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hunnie_girl
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0 posted 2007-08-16 03:07 AM


What is it about you I can't live without,
How can I love you without having doubts,
Why do I feel ripped when we are apart,
Do I love you that much with all of my heart?

Could it be the way you look in my eyes,
or the way I trust you to never tell lies,
The way you lean down to kiss the top of my head,
or having comfort even with so much unsaid,

How we can talk without saying a word,
or that our love is the best song I've heard,
The way you light up when I enter the room,
How you breathe in to smell my perfume,

What is it about you I can't live without,
Must be the way you love me without any doubt.

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

© Copyright 2007 Krysti - All Rights Reserved
JamesMichael
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1 posted 2007-08-16 07:12 AM


A pleasure to read...James
kasey191
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2 posted 2007-08-16 09:04 AM


Beautiful
Gentle Spirit
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3 posted 2007-08-16 09:06 AM


Krysti, this is LOVELY!  Well done.
FadingSun
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4 posted 2007-08-16 11:40 AM


good stuff K, good stuff!

In the sight of Love, fear isn't even as great as a single hair:  in the law of Love, everything is offered as a sacrifice

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5 posted 2007-08-16 11:48 AM


~very nicely done, hunnie~~~

The rhyme, well timed and smooth~~~

~enjoyed

  

hunnie_girl
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6 posted 2007-08-17 12:34 PM


thank you all for your kind replies
MegMeg
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7 posted 2007-09-14 04:09 PM


aww... it's so beautiful, y'all sound real pretty together.
¢¾Meg

JL
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8 posted 2007-09-15 11:11 AM


Heartfelt words.

JL

Blessed are those who are generous, because they feed the poor.
~Proverbs 22:9 NLT

Earth Angel
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9 posted 2007-09-15 12:32 PM


"The way you light up when I enter the room,
How you breathe in to smell my perfume,

What is it about you I can't live without,
Must be the way you love me without any doubt."

~ It appears to me that there are things about you that he "can't live without"!

I am happy for both of you!

To love and being loved in return,

EA

hunnie_girl
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10 posted 2007-09-17 02:14 AM


thank you for your replies
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11 posted 2007-09-19 09:02 AM


love is so wonderful! enjoy and embrace it.

take care,

Amy

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Gumpy
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12 posted 2007-11-18 03:31 AM


I love it.
"What is it about you I can't live without,
How can I love you without having doubts,
Why do I feel ripped when we are apart,
Do I love you that much with all of my heart?"

saved in library for sure.
Thanks for the read.

Gumpy

Heartbroken

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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13 posted 2007-11-18 06:11 AM


What is it about you I can't live without,
Must be the way you love me without any doubt.


Krysti... love is a powerful thing.. beautifully said!  RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

poetninoit
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14 posted 2007-12-06 01:55 AM


that poem could warm the heart of the devil himself
Abbeon
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15 posted 2007-12-18 02:44 PM


Another one of Sir Cupids arrows written at its finest. Amazing as all ways.

Abbeon.

The hollow emptiness, the crazed thoughts left to survive

jbal892
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16 posted 2007-12-18 10:20 PM


great read =) reminds me of my girlfriend, it's a relaxing feeling to have
sonatina425
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17 posted 2007-12-20 12:41 PM


I really like this poem. It reminds me so much of my boyfriend-- he does pretty much everything you mention. The way you worded some parts such as, "Could it be the way you look in my eyes,/or the way I trust you to never tell lies".

Beautiful. =)

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