Oh, Those Morning Thoughts

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Open Poetry #41

Oh, Those Morning Thoughts

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

0 posted 2007-08-15 09:18 AM

Oh, Those Morning Thoughts

It's a yesterdays' walk for me
when a step back in time meant
warmth on a snow covered day
in the hands of, swinging to the footprints
of those left behind.

Today, just another tomorrow
of loneliness, silence loosing my memory
into anonymous fear with words
rising to fingertips dancing their own tune
sent to those who know.

But what of tomorrow? The hunger of need
miming the thoughts,
reaching out for their calling
trying to breathe life into a flat lined zone
still chasing stale dreams.

M

"Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less."
(Will Moss)

bel1e
Senior Member

since 2006-07-24

Posts 1631

1 posted 2007-08-15 09:35 AM

oh..very strong imagery there~~~felt that dire flat line~

~so well penned, my friend~

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

2 posted 2007-08-15 09:41 AM

not sure..dreams are ever stale, other than when we lose the true passion for them..

this is felt ma'am... the quiet of the undertones running deeper than the surface of words...

well done... indeed..

Edward Grim
Senior Member

since 2005-12-18

Posts 1154
Greenville, South Carolina

3 posted 2007-08-15 11:17 AM

You did a superb job on this poem. I particularly love your choice of words throughout.

"Today, just another tomorrow
of loneliness"

That iss amazing. Very original wording. Cheers Ms Bliss.

"Well I wish that you would cheat with someone, 'cause you're like diggin' holes in water and we know that can't be done."

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