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ThisDiamond
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0 posted 2007-08-14 07:21 PM



Fluidity

In the resource of giving rain
I beseech the ear of the magician
For gently intimate cognition

Fall away the silver drops of yesterday
Let it go, the future has no precedence
These dreams I seek by far smack decadence
Both hands guide the flow

My lips move, still moist with linger
Under pretense of a thunder strike
Bellow, the skies cast over

But tears or watering minds mingle
So I swim, moving with the current
Conditions of whim, floating with the wind
Saying as I feel, river, raft or reel

Waterfall, guides tenderly what cannot speak
For wet, can melt that business casual physique
Hiding what for sure you cannot pry to promenade

Only for the showering affection this façade
As longing is a victorious sea, when love is scented fluidity

Copyright Kkh 8/14/07

© Copyright 2007 Kathleen Harris - All Rights Reserved
Gentle Spirit
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1 posted 2007-08-14 07:23 PM


My lips move, still moist with linger
Under pretense of a thunder strike
Bellow, the skies cast over

But tears or watering minds mingle
So I swim, moving with the current
Conditions of whim, floating with the wind
Saying as I feel, river, raft or reel
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Much enjoyed this piece Kathleen, especially these above lines.  Nicely done lady.

secondhanddreampoet
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2 posted 2007-08-14 08:33 PM


I LOVE:

“gently intimate cognition”;

“love is scented fluidity”;

“Conditions of whim, floating with the wind”

Applause!!

iliana
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3 posted 2007-08-15 03:12 AM


Really fine one, TD....the words flow perfectly and enhance the feel of it!   ....jo
Bronzeage
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4 posted 2007-08-15 03:17 AM


A lovely piece. I like the opening very much.

"In the resource of giving rain
I beseech the ear of the magician
For gently intimate cognition"

The Lady
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5 posted 2007-08-15 11:18 PM




and I love...

"Fall away the silver drops of yesterday"

beautiful images here TD


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6 posted 2007-08-16 06:40 PM


Enjoyed this, especially:
"As longing is a victorious sea, when love is scented fluidity"

JL
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7 posted 2007-08-19 12:45 PM


"Only for the showering affection this façade
As longing is a victorious sea, when love is scented fluidity"

Even in make believe there is hope, simply because thought is fantasy without action.
With action that facade becomes reality; and built with care a bearing wall.
Your writings always have a way of making the mind stretch out in search of some very deep meaning.  I very much enjoy your work.

JL

  

Magnus
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8 posted 2007-08-19 02:56 PM


As longing is a victorious sea, when love is scented fluidity

Very powerful ending line.  Love it!!

Earth Angel
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9 posted 2007-08-19 03:05 PM


My emotions and imagination were pulled along with the tides of your liquid words.

Loving hug,
EA

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