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Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

0 posted 2007-08-12 12:22 PM

How I lust;
To explore with fingertips,
The denied
Of the eye
But defines in your movement,
Perhaps sin
Creeping in
To journey beyond those lips,
Hands longing,
Belonging,
Where they dare not to be sent;
How I lust
Quietly not to break trust.

Gloom

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

1 posted 2007-08-12 10:00 AM

Pushing the 80 - 20 rule aside, and giving a -2 for the prior response,
The sensuality and detail of tender thought written here was beautiful to read.
A bit different style from your norm, but a talented rendering of charm and gracefulness.
TD

Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

2 posted 2007-08-12 10:29 AM

Thank you ThisDiamond,
For taking the time to read and respond,
Actually, this is an old style which I used often in the far past,
A mere Decade ago

Gloom

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

3 posted 2007-08-12 11:49 AM

I loved this...

"How I lust;
To explore with fingertips,
The denied
Of the eye"

know that feeling

Larry C

Member Patricius

since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

4 posted 2007-08-12 01:38 PM

Well, Prof -
Personally I like the restraint that this describes inposed with desire. And I have always liked your style.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane,
I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

Edward Grim
Senior Member

since 2005-12-18

Posts 1154
Greenville, South Carolina

5 posted 2007-08-12 02:12 PM

HAHAHA! Look Gloom:

quote:
Whoa I hope you didn't stay up late to write this. "The denied of the eye?" I guess that's one way to describe the unseen. Is that from the George Bush school of verse? "But defines in your movement" Ok this really is obtuse. Are you referring to her butt or is this an indication of a problem with tenses? Finally this strikes me as a tad lecherous which most do not enjoy. On a constructive note: Better luck next time, as they say.

Rosie is trying to get revenge! Heh, this place is starting to get lively again. Well, I enjoyed the poem. Cheers mate.

"Well I wish that you would cheat with someone, 'cause you're like diggin' holes in water and we know that can't be done."

Snowflake From Hell
Senior Member

since 2003-07-10

Posts 777
My own little Icey Oblivion

6 posted 2007-08-12 03:36 PM

I agree the restraint was a nice touch

I am the little cracked mirror

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

7 posted 2007-08-12 06:18 PM

shaking my head and smiling...

I confess a kinship with you on this. Lately I find myself typing a bit more gingerly, as my forum decorum became my bad reputation, and it doesn't seem to matter what I say, however sincerely, to whom...reputation rules yanno. *shrug*

Ah well, at least if I keep my shadow I'll have someone to applaud with me.

*applauding*

I like the form, and if I recall correctly, you had a few more forms I enjoyed that were not well known.

*pause*

I guess somebody can read something naughty into that too.

*ahem*

I was referring to the Japanese forms you once did as a series though.

*sheesh*

At any rate, it's great to read you again, A.

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

8 posted 2007-08-12 06:24 PM

Nice...James

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

9 posted 2007-08-12 09:25 PM

Thank you all (-1)
for the comments

Gloom

aziza
Member Elite

since 2006-07-09

Posts 2995
Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy!

10 posted 2007-08-15 01:39 AM

It's a pleasure to read

A

hunnie_girl

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since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

11 posted 2007-08-16 01:49 AM

I really like this... great format and content...
Krysti

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

12 posted 2007-08-16 06:23 AM

Thank you, aziza,
For taking the time to read and respond.

Thank you, hunnie_girl,
To me format is an important part of the poem
Glad you enjoyed.

Gloom

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