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secondhanddreampoet
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since 2006-11-07

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a 'Universalist' !

0 posted 2007-08-11 05:51 PM

         SUMMER ‘FALLing’

        [hints of change and
         memories of the
         Salisbury plain;
         'Stonehenge’; and
          'crop circles']

As the late-summer twilight breeze
  subsides
in a lingering after-scent of pine,
(with hints of Autumn’s frost-tipped
  wonders)
we may grasp the final thimbleful
of crystalline stellar-dreams,
and scan the endless, taciturn skies
to spot a cosmic turn of cogs,
(or a page in eternity’s infinite ledger)
which might confirm some universal
  ‘purpose’ in us,
or reveal a grand galactic compass
to point a far ‘different and better way’,
and yet…
the finest ‘voice’ (and answers)
may lie still…within ourselves
  or our horizons,
in the grand and timeless artistry
of Gaia’s gentle ‘agriglyphs’
speaking humbly…quietly…indelibly...
to only those hearts and minds
  and spirits
with the kindest ‘sense and
  sensibility’…
to truly ‘listen’!

                       ~

[This message has been edited by secondhanddreampoet (08-11-2007 07:56 PM).]

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

1 posted 2007-08-11 05:58 PM

BRAVO! some day, I will sit within
an agriglyph, immerse myself in cosmic cog(cog-nizance).

Hyaunt
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since 2007-07-12

Posts 74

2 posted 2007-08-11 06:29 PM

Wow!!!!!

Hyaunt

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

3 posted 2007-08-11 09:58 PM

sssssssssssshhhhhhhh (I'm not here, okay?)

But it's a such a lovely place to be right now, I can't resist.

Reading your work reminds me, that perhaps I should slow down...

The only thing that I wasn't sure of was a few of the parenthetical phrases--but I use those alot too--I'm just curious, because in my head, I read paranthetical as a "whisper"--whereas in this poem, they didn't read as afterthought at all.

In fact, they read as emphasis. (But hey, I ain't no expert--so consider that idle curiousity, not criticism)

And I can wait for Autumn now--once upon a time I'd say I couldn't--but I have learned hard lessons about wanting.

Thanks for sharing. Much enjoyed the cool breeze.

secondhanddreampoet
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since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

4 posted 2007-08-11 10:48 PM

not that there is necessarily any good (nor 'valid') reason for it, but I tend to use
ellipses [...] when I hope to tempt the reader to take a somewhat longer pause
[for more careful thought perhaps] than just a comma might suggest; and, I use
the parentheses around phrases that I feel are somewhat like 'asides' [additional
information or images not necessarily 'absolutely essential' to the poem; etc.]

The Lady
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since 2005-12-26

Posts 7634
The Southwest

5 posted 2007-08-12 01:44 PM

a gentleness to lull us into autumn

lovely poet

ArtSolstice
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since 2007-03-18

Posts 498

6 posted 2007-08-12 07:23 PM

DreamPoet, this is simply marvelous. Can't find one part I like better than another -- it's all grand!

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

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Realms of Light

7 posted 2007-08-12 11:45 PM

" SUMMER ‘FALLing’" ~ Clever title!

        "[hints of change and
         memories of the
         Salisbury plain;
         'Stonehenge’; and
          'crop circles']"

~ Now you really had me hooked! ~ and I thoroughly enjoyed what you so poetically delivered!

Linda

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