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Dream Series 1-8 (Drowning Pools And Oz )
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Dream Series 1-8 (Drowning Pools And Oz ) |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
All roads can get cold And yellow pavers laid end to end do nothing To stop clouds or storms; to stop the winds Dorothy stretched with tired resign on the bed Reveling in the feel of cotton under her skin As she tried to remember when a shower And clean hair had felt like so much A luxury as now But her eyes bore the haze still Of dust and chaff as follows a fever Or becomes precursor to the ache of chills “You know, Tinman,” she began to me “I can’t stay in Oz, I have family.” “Friends…” I looked at her and listened Waiting for her to continue as I brushed rust From the wrinkles of tin ignoring the way her words echoed in me like corrugated torn with rust and wind when I had the dread of what she'd say “I,” she started and let the word pause then found her tongue again “I’ve done so much back home” her eyes lowered within the glazed mix of steam from the shower she had stepped from and glare of too bright a light within the room “But I’ve never been with a tinman nor felt the things I feel with you” I stopped my attention to crinkled bends of plating And turned my head slightly to one side As I wondered what next she would say knowing a tinman had no right to ask her to stay in this fey place or to sacrifice “too bad you aren’t real” she whispered to herself as much as she did to me “back home, I am a popular girl and have over time known a lot of men who would woo me for my skin” I sat down on the edge of bed next to her And looked at the smooth bare of throat the swell of breasts that rose and fell as she lay Understanding why it would appeal To those who like her Were real I drew a bit of Ozone into the hollow of chest Put a single stiff finger to her lips And did my best “shhhh….” Half hissed between fixed lips ‘but…. I want you to know” she pleaded through words and eyes now beginning to lose focus as the journey took its toll and such microbes as we in Oz are prone to carry crept within the blood of her “Not now” I whispered then turned off the light covering her with a blanket for warmth “rest…. You can tell me later.” I said “if you still have that desire” Her eyes closed In a drift of home that mixed Within the skein of threads as Oz ties to soul And dreamed not in peace but torn While I sat upon the sill Trying not to rust as I watched her wishing I too was real And not made of hollow tin She could never feel pulse As heart beat against her breast Come morning Perhaps we’ll stay another day Or maybe she will click her heels And go Moonlight looks like water When it crowns a yellow brick road But I can’t swim in either and more than both I drown in Her Cursing always... Other worlds |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
~~I hear rumor tell she never left the tin embrace of Oz~~ Chief~ ~a delight...in every sense of the word~  |
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BBGrrl Member
since 2007-07-17
Posts 181BC, Canada |
*undone* This is incredible. Wow. I can hear russet-coloured tears pattering. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Ah~ belle... but you have seen the rest of the series and know it did not end there... thanks always kid.... for the eyes and the kindness of your words... |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
BBgrrl.... undone...can be a dangerous state thanks for dropping in..for reading here.. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
“too bad you aren’t real” she whispered to herself as much as she did to me ~*~ But one never, really, ever knows... in Oz land.... one can pretend, in dreams to know more than all that might be real.... |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Ah damn This is truly something I wish had leaked out of my own pen... I love a good hook, my friend, and this is stellar. Now, I shall retire, g'nite |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
OK, so tell me again what it is that is supposed to make me NOT think that you are an incredibly talented writer, and what it is that is supposed to make me not sigh when I read the words? Wow Ron, this is just wow, leaving me speechless. But that tin man? I do believe sir has a heart of gold eh?  Very much enjoyed indeed! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Gentle one.... The argument against me being a talented writer is pretty simple..all I have to do is read a truly talented poet..and see where the phrasing goes wrong on my end..how I overuse words and images..the way I am limited to a smaller range of style and content... I need only read some of the really good writers here and know I do not hold a candle to their talent or skill... your kindness...and the fact you find something to apprecite in my scribbles..is truly..a blessing..and I thank you for that sincerely.. but arguing about my talent or lack of is one of those things I am not sure anyone can convince me of.. I'm just hard headed and set to believe my limitations.. thanks sweety... truly... for your kind opinion... it is nice to hear someone thinks you have talent or are good at something.....and it truly is generous of you to think so about me. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
No argument needed or intended I assure you sir. Just trying to give a much deserved compliment. Indeed, there are many talented writers here, and indeed, we all have our limitations. But I like to tend to think that limitations are only what we hold within our own minds.  Learn to wish that everything should come to pass exactly as it does. ~Epictetus |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
El Capitan sails the blue seas again! You have most decidedly peaked my interest in reading the remaining 7. ~ You sensuous raconteur, you!  Subtlety can be highly intoxicating.  EA |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Gentle one... yes, I know you were complimenting me..and I thank you truly... it is very gracious of you... and greatly appreciated. thank you |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Earth Angel... ah~ thank you ma'am... for the eyes and kind words... the rest of the series? hmmm.... I would have to do some looking and borrowing to put it all together..and in the end..the excerpts from it are probably better than the whole... but I will give it some thought... thank you.... for the kind reply..and for your encouragement. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
wranx's first words say it best... *S* And I know that if GS can't convince you, I can't either... but for what it's worth... she's right! *S* I absolutely loved this! *S* |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Suthern ..ma'am... you spoil me with your kind words... thank you hun |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Worthy of a second [third, fourth, fifth] read... |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
thank you ma'am.... my own eyes don't see it worthy of such atention, but it is flattering yours do... |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
“But I’ve never been with a tinman nor felt the things I feel with you” dang, you been reading my mail? you are a legend, you know and the line between real and whatever else there is... I'm still looking and crying. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
OMG, I love this one! Terrific! |
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