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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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"Ma? Y'gonna be like Syd?" Shaking shoulders an eclipse of much too much too soon. Dammit not like this--not this--- this could be a bad thing, you had better straighten up real tight. I didn't mean that you'd be you - I never meant that I'd be me -- down a sunset avenue dancing with the furries freak fuzzy was reality... "yer not gonna be like Syd..." My momma never was like this-- (Momma never was at all.) God, my son is hairy beast and he plucks a mean guitar jousting Jackson here at me, "Sister, Sister" screaming "Ma"... "watch me Mom, while I do this--." and damned if he ain't talented (being mine and all) squabbling his fingers for the justice of the last fret's fall trembling intensity watching from beneath his brow-- furrowed frowning curls and tall smiling now: "you are not Syd." Watch me, Ma, while I do this... I watch him and I'm dizziness crazy diamond (I am Syd) blazing eyes a bad cut is one sharp spark of promising swimming in the dark as his finger lingers lovingly the note--again, again, again... (As I swear I am not Syd.) [This message has been edited by serenity blaze (08-08-2007 08:46 AM).] |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
ah~ always an education and a pleasure to read you.... this is lyrical without being so... telling without revealing to much of what we do not know.... damn..... it is good to read again |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Karen, I so enjoy your talent and loved the flow of this, but even more I smiled as I realized that our children, indeed do make us smile (most of the time..  . A pleasure to read you today lady K.  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
smile...danke' and "mr. meticulous" corrected my spelling too. can't imagine where he gets that from.  Thanks for the eyes..er, or is it the breath? I dunno--I don't know proper lingo anymore. My son is handsome though, ain't he?  |
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BBGrrl Member
since 2007-07-17
Posts 181BC, Canada |
"ten years have got behind you".. You amaze me, Blaze. I don't see a picture of your boy tho  Looking at one of your poems is like following your synapses - a journey that it completely othersensory, and swift and startling as a rollercoaster. |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Damn woman. Just.. damn. It's like when I read you, I can hear you in my head. And it all makes perfect sense, and you never miss a beat.  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
oh youuuuuuuuu.... I wanna write like YOU! Thank you, lovely! My e mail's the same--drop me a line okay? |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Yes he is! Mine is similar...plays guitar, hairy (his hair is longer than mine), and he is my big, huge protector... Sons are the greatest.  "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Donna, Suze, BBg...it's...oh I could cry. His senior year--and my baby will be...sigh. Not gonna think about that now. He's really good too--and the beautiful part is? THE BOY LOVES CLASSIC ROCK. Gawd I did gooooooooooooood!!! Thanks for sharing my joy! |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
classic rock she says!! whooo-hooo....Yep, K, you definately done good!!!! |
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Hyaunt Member
since 2007-07-12
Posts 74 |
Always good and always make me wonder if I truly got what you tried to say. enjoyed the read. Hyaunt |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
You did indeed do good... both in the son and the song (I couldn't help singing some of your words... silently, mind you... don't want to frighten my co-workers with my screech *G*) Excellent!!! Just one question. *G* Is there anything else BUT classic R&R??? Not for this gal! LOL |
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Edward Grim Senior Member
since 2005-12-18
Posts 1154Greenville, South Carolina |
This is great K! I love love love it. The beginning of the poem is cooked to perfection. "Well I wish that you would cheat with someone, 'cause you're like diggin' holes in water and we know that can't be done." |
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MegMeg Member
since 2007-05-14
Posts 85Virginia |
wow...your poem sure is pretty..... you have such an amazing gift of being able to paint a picture with your words.. i hope i can write as beautiful as you do one day. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Ser, of course you did good! Sounds like you're going to be on the road again *wink*. Enjoyed this greatly and tell him from me to "rock on!" ....jojo |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Ahh the witch cast another word spell, as perhaps few can do here (or elsewhere). Another interesting read. Gloom |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
grin-- if ya'll keep letting me gloat on my kids, I am gonna have to embarrass them much more. Thanks so much... I really am blessed--good company here--and good company "here". |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
I see him Karen and he's beautiful almost as beautiful as your love for him |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Kate? What's that song? "These are the good old days" I keep telling myself that as my boy cranks his ampstack to the point where my teeth rattle.  I'm glad that you could see without me posting a pic--he's sooooo private about that stuff. Thanks all for sharing the love. Much appreciated. |
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The_Nameless_One Member
since 2007-01-20
Posts 165Missouri |
this is just stupendously amazing i loved reading this over and over and over i want it to stick in my head for a few days from the very beginning I could hear Shine on you Crazy Diamond's exquisite masterpiece of music in the background as your words came alive in the depths of my soul thank you so very much for sharing your beautiful gift of words I just graduated this last year and I was lucky enough to go to a Pink Floyd concert while my mother was 7 months along at Arrowhead Stadium in '89 I truly do believe it had an impact on me seeing as how they are my favorite band of all time LONG LIVE CLASSIC ROCK!!! |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I would tell Zach how cute he is but he may blush so I won't. So there! |
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Edward Grim Senior Member
since 2005-12-18
Posts 1154Greenville, South Carolina |
I just wanted to read this again. |
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