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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2007-08-08 06:43 AM



she had her jimmy jesus holy water
in a gravel glass griping
fair grounds on senior day
between her toes like cocoa

I didn't know her name then
the tag was hidden under mountains
of funny face silk and sayings
and she was behind the paintings

peeking around at little girls
in strollers making noises
that would sound better on windows
but she used wrist skin candy coatings

then gave me a busty and a belly hug
and a veteran's poppy with stem
that made a new whole in my shoulder
when she kissed my neck too slowly

and made me feel her soft sighed freedom


___________

daark



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serenity blaze
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1 posted 2007-08-08 06:48 AM


and I thought you had me at hello--

but no--she did.

You have a way about you....

bel1e
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2 posted 2007-08-08 07:00 AM


Your poetry, Daark...always so unique....and vivid~like stealing tiny glimpses of moments through tiny windows...

lol..

that would make me a peeping tom~of sorts...

~love what you do

  

Cpat Hair
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3 posted 2007-08-08 08:10 AM


nicely captured Dark.. the persona and the feel woven so tightly..so few words.. a skill to be admired for sure...



Gentle Spirit
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4 posted 2007-08-08 09:30 AM


awwww darn D did this ever make me smile.     and capt is correct..yes, you do it all right...tight right/write babe.  Big ole bear hugs comin west atcha.
BBGrrl
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5 posted 2007-08-08 11:42 AM


A lovely treat, daark.  I enjoy seeing your visions.
inkedgoddess
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6 posted 2007-08-08 10:00 PM


i love peeping
inside your window
with or without
drapes

Sunshine
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7 posted 2007-08-08 10:22 PM


"I didn't know her name...."

and when written by you...

any name would be welcome.

Thanks, Sir.

You made somejuanita smile...


Dark Stranger
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8 posted 2007-08-09 06:32 AM


you guys make me smile

all of you are wonderful with your comments

someday I will hug each of you

well maybe a handshake Cpat

thanks so much

aziza
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9 posted 2007-08-13 12:43 PM


I get a hug too
'cause I like this

Yeah, I like it
so you owe me

_____________________
Certificate for 1 Hug
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iliana
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10 posted 2007-08-13 02:28 AM


Quite a portrait!  Yep....that wrist skin candy always buys a certain freedom.  Great read.
Dark Stranger
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11 posted 2007-08-13 06:25 AM


ms az, hope you have time
for real slow?  thanks babe


_________

iliana, thank you for the look in

Angel4aKing
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12 posted 2007-08-17 12:38 PM


WOW....I couldn't read enough of your poetry. You are truely insightful and interesting to read that is for sure...I leave now with chills up my back...take care sweet stranger....

~~~kingsangel~~~

Dark Stranger
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13 posted 2007-08-17 03:18 PM


angel, you look so good with chills, thanks babe
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