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Last of the Summer Wine
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Last of the Summer Wine |
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MoonShadow Senior Member
since 2001-08-02
Posts 943Dark side of the Moon. |
Last of the Summer Wine His jasmine and her lilac both danced a lovers’ tune they lived the dream of hopefuls in shadows of the moon. Unlike the lovely flowers that touch and smell and see dreams are imagination with things not meant to be Like many star crossed lovers with souls joined oh sublime find their hopes all drift away with the last of the summer wine MoonShadow . [This message has been edited by MoonShadow (08-05-2007 10:20 PM).] |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
lovely weaving of words & imagery~ |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
nice ‘write’! I am particularly fond of the images and lines: “ liv(ing) the dream …. in shadows of the moon”; AND: “…star crossed lovers… find their hopes all drift away with the last of the summer wine(!)” applause!! |
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MoonShadow Senior Member
since 2001-08-02
Posts 943Dark side of the Moon. |
Baby Girl... Thank you for the read. Glad you enjoyed. Bruce... Thank you. You always look for and find the best. |
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ggrn3 Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 433Nahunta Georgia U.S. |
Summer wine, oh so bitter sweet. Loved this one Shadow. Garfield |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Are they...James |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I have always been partial to lilac and could all but smell them as I read your words. Such lovely verse you gift us with today. beautiful writing, sir Moonshadow. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
A beautiful sip of love-life. Well done! |
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MoonShadow Senior Member
since 2001-08-02
Posts 943Dark side of the Moon. |
Garfield... Thank you for the read and response. James... the beauty and the fleeting fragie nature make all bitter sweet. GS... Milady, such kind words are most inspirational. Thank you. Midnightsun... were it more than a sip, I would fill my cup. Thank you for your response. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
the last of the summer wine leaves blue stains on lips gentle Sir MoonShadow and stains are sometimes impossible to remove |
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Roysie Member
since 2007-08-05
Posts 102Canada |
A neat little ditty. I like it. Here's the problem: First stanza: should read hopefulness. Second stanza: lovely? you can do better than that! Third stanza: The last line is hopeless and needs to be reworked. |
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MoonShadow Senior Member
since 2001-08-02
Posts 943Dark side of the Moon. |
Milady Kate, Thank you for your kind words. The 'stains' or 'memories' are precious and meant to linger for an eternity when all else has faded and dispiated in the wind. I would not want to wash the stains away... ever. |
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MoonShadow Senior Member
since 2001-08-02
Posts 943Dark side of the Moon. |
Roy... thank you for the read. The work remains complete... as is. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
A brilliant title, drew me here to read many times. Each, came away with me, in shimmer. Nicely done. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
AhKen~ You write such lovely romantic notions~ An ocean of emotion flows and glows through each thought~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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MoonShadow Senior Member
since 2001-08-02
Posts 943Dark side of the Moon. |
T.D.... Thank you for the read, your kind words... and the shimmer. Marge... Romance and emotions abound in those of us so cursed that it cannot remain hidden. Thank you for your kind words. MoonShadow . |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
So beautiful - and delicate. I love this. A |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
All too often the case with summer romance. Hey...but I liked your poem! |
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MoonShadow Senior Member
since 2001-08-02
Posts 943Dark side of the Moon. |
Alison... Thank you kindly, Milady. Iliana... Thanks for the read. To Romantics hope springs eternal and spring brings blossoms anew with promises of Love MoonShadow . |
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