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Huan Yi
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0 posted 2007-08-05 05:52 PM


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That’s the one
I love

Lying like
So much wreckage
On the bed

And who is this
So obsequious

With gloves
Upon his hands


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serenity blaze
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1 posted 2007-08-05 07:41 PM


The pain that this evoked startled me.
JamesMichael
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2 posted 2007-08-05 07:57 PM


Nice writing...you say a lot with few words...and I like that...James
TomMark
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3 posted 2007-08-05 09:01 PM


agree!

Tomtoo

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4 posted 2007-08-07 12:00 PM


Oh, wow... You write such heart-wrench in so few words...
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