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JamesMichael
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0 posted 2007-08-04 06:21 AM


Some Women

Some women
seem to have
so much going
for themselves
that I feel
like a bus stop
that they
just used as
as a place
to spray on some
more perfume
and before the
fragrance blooms
they go on their way
and all I was given
a chance to say
was "I'll miss you."

JamesLee
03August
2007



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bel1e
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since 2006-07-24
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1 posted 2007-08-04 07:28 AM


James~

awww...I wish I could say it gets better...but maybe we are all bustops...one way or another~


~enjoyed this~
~beLLe

  

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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2 posted 2007-08-04 08:11 AM


James.... you write words of wisdom here my sweet friend... enjoyed  RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

JamesMichael
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3 posted 2007-08-04 03:49 PM


Thank you belle and Roniece for the nice responses...
I'm just missing someone special right now...James

secondhanddreampoet
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4 posted 2007-08-05 10:09 PM


good one...BOY...do I know the feeling!!

[once again...this seems (to me at least) to be
one of those good 'ol "slice of everyperson's-
life dejavu" writes...I'm sure any of the fine (female)
'P.I.P.' poets could pen an effective converse (bookend/
companion) piece to this one as well!]

applause!!

ggrn3
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5 posted 2007-08-06 12:37 PM


Boy, do I know this feeling.  I don't know what to tell you dude except maybe to drive the bus.  I do know that this was nicely penned. It shows strong emotion and pain.  Sorry you're hurting though, or missing that special someone.  

Garfield

TomMark
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6 posted 2007-08-06 01:33 AM


How true!!! Good poem.

Tomtoo

Bronzeage
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since 2007-07-20
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7 posted 2007-08-06 10:34 PM


Nice write. I am familiar with the feeling.  Something about faint hearts and hot irons comes to mind.
BBGrrl
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8 posted 2007-08-08 12:31 PM


Very sad.. *squeeze*
JamesMichael
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9 posted 2007-08-08 04:24 PM


Thank you Secondhanddreampoet, ggrn3, Tom Mack, Bronzeage and BB girl for the wonderful responses...James
MindBodySoul
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since 2007-01-10
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10 posted 2007-08-08 08:29 PM


My dear James

Sometimes that is all we are, a bus stop.... a resting place before moving on..  I know the feeling tooo well and I wish it could be different... but it is not...

Beautiful write!  

Jen--->MindBodySoul

gwaihir
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since 2007-07-20
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Sub-tropical, USA
11 posted 2007-08-08 08:51 PM


James --  I think it is better to be a bus stop than to be a door mat.  There is always a chance the next one will miss the bus and stay a while.      
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