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Cpat Hair
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0 posted 2007-08-03 03:37 PM



August becomes cicadas with red eyes
Shattering bee balm along hillsides
Into the thousand echoes of loosestrife now ragged
In dust and dew becoming scarce
Does but move along the hoar of leaves
To stick to fine hair

I breathe blue sage air into lungs found empty
When I exhaled the images of wild tangles
Combed through fingers
A soft soft flight of lunar moth to land
Sternum split upon iron cleave stuck in hard ground

Footsteps still upon new grass
The moon creeps along the garden path to grace
Bare shoulders in lace of shadow veil
To hide your eyes from all that might see
Dilated pupils pleased
I play the breeze and cover your skin
With the cool midnight blue of astilbe as it grows
Along the clavicle of bed
An articulation of leaves and stem to bring
53 petals upon the ground
a covering white where shed is now bare
I gaze upon cinnamon and tatted vines

Dressed with care
To reveal slow seduction of skin to green
My jealous eyes devour an August sound
Of cotton slid to pool at ankles
Stepped free I might begin to see
How the days of dogs brought relief from
The heat that drove
Honeysuckle to climb a bound fence
Twined among the rose

I gather the sharp legs of cricket to bone
letting marrow seep alone through dry soil
Pricking fingers upon the spines
And discarded shells of cicadas
Red eyed as they in short lived cling
Rend August nights of dreams
And I bleed with lilies along woods edge

A death of wet pillowed whorl fading soft

I find my bed
And you

Wrapped in blue shawl of morning glory
Await
Awake
The moons last drench of light
Bringing soft whispered names

Sweet pea pinked slow blooms
And
Forget-me-
Not~

To August rains

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nakdthoughts
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1 posted 2007-08-03 05:29 PM


Dressed with care
To reveal slow seduction of skin to green
My jealous eyes devour an August sound
Of cotton slid to pool at ankles
Stepped free I might begin to see
How the days of dogs brought relief from
The heat that drove
Honeysuckle to climb a bound fence
Twined among the rose


such  sensual writing C,


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2 posted 2007-08-03 07:53 PM


I breathe blue sage air into lungs found empty

~*~

When I saw this line, I knew I would be home again,

and then more lines tumbled in, a wild weed
of thought roaming to find a resting place,

and it all became mine...and not mine.

Thank you so much
for sharing again.

You've been missed.


wranx
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3 posted 2007-08-03 11:50 PM


Just to let you know I stopped by for another look...and still figure you to be a poet

*grin*

bel1e
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4 posted 2007-08-04 10:46 AM


~can't get that cicada-song outta my head~
and this:


"I find my bed
And you

Wrapped in blue shawl of morning glory
Await
Awake
The moons last drench of light
Bringing soft whispered names

Sweet pea pinked slow blooms
And
Forget-me-
Not~

To August rains"


~~~siiigh
~baby

  

Martie
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5 posted 2007-08-04 11:41 AM


Ron, dear .... I am amazed at the places this poem took me...so filled with color and sensual underlying dusk.  I loved it.  At first while I read, I thought of a child's art when they pour color on a paper and fold it in half...then press.  Like a butterfly, dressed, then undressed.
Gentle Spirit
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6 posted 2007-08-06 02:02 PM


Your use of imagery is so masterful Ron, downright captivating one could say. Absolutely, lovely.  Definately, enjoy reading you.  So glad that you have returned, for however long that time will allow us to have you amongst us again. Indeed, pleasure sir.  
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7 posted 2007-08-06 02:11 PM


thank you all... for the kind eyes and words..

your comments and encouragement are greatly appreciated...

many thanks to you all...


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8 posted 2007-08-06 07:24 PM


"I breathe blue sage air into lungs found empty
When I exhaled the images of wild tangles
Combed through fingers"

Exquisite imagery Ron.  

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9 posted 2007-08-07 12:15 PM


I am a glutton... eagerly feasting at your table. *S*

And this??? *S* Worth every calorie *G*

vandana
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10 posted 2007-08-07 12:16 PM


enjoyed
LeeJ
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11 posted 2007-08-07 05:49 PM


Dressed with care
To reveal slow seduction of skin to green
My jealous eyes devour an August sound
Of cotton slid to pool at ankles
Stepped free I might begin to see
How the days of dogs brought relief from
The heat that drove
Honeysuckle to climb a bound fence
Twined among the rose
I am so happy to read you again...Gwad, this is so reflective and legitament....
a barrage of salsa, full blown symphony that is life and love...(sigh) this was like an inner vision into paradise...it's like, what else is there?  


secondhanddreampoet
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12 posted 2007-08-08 05:51 PM


a very fine ‘write’!...

I am particularly fond of:

“August becomes cicadas with red eyes”;

“I breathe blue sage air into lungs found empty
When I exhaled the images of wild tangles
Combed through fingers
A soft soft flight of lunar moth to land”;

AND:

“relief from
The heat that drove
Honeysuckle to climb a bound fence
Twined among the rose”

Serious applause!!

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