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Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

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0 posted 2007-08-03 08:21 AM

Half the moon owned the sky
As the other half lay with the shadows
Cast from far away in a languish of waning days
As marked the ebb of tides upon distant sand
Bereft of daffodils or calla yet bloomed

Wilhelm paused with quill to listen
As old again the tales being told
Blended within him too as his mind drifted
To the beauty of her sitting within the quiet eyes of dusk
Encouraging the ancient crone to speak on in
Another tale of cautionary gloom

‘Big teeth to eat you” he heard
and scribbled with fine pen the lines
but found himself thinking of how it would be
to bind such fair skin as hers in silk
as he became the wolf that devoured her innocence
with a greedy tongue and slow words of pleasure
as he could not publish in a children’s tale
yet could scribe in a script of fingers
on the pale vellum of hip before erasing them
in whisper of lips and tongue speaking language yet born
to the half moon or imagined by the family Grimm

I roused within the ache of lying too long
Upon the sinew and bones of old nights
To find dog-eared pages fanning with rustle
Upon breeze of open window as the half moon
shaded grey lace on words as they flip paged
into the dreams of Wilhelm and those I had of you

Groan of move stilled upon half breath
Found light enough to add the lamp
So weak eyes could follow lines written such a long age ago
Of baskets taken forth while dressed in red hood
Old wolves prowled paths as led to glen
But my mind did not find innocence within
And wandered to the shape of leg beneath draping cape
As the canine heart beat in slow watch
Craving fruit crushed upon skin
Leaving breathless fair her who would lie with him

So shadowed realm of half moon stalked
The tick and swing of pendulum
Stretching dark fingers under words that I might follow on
The tale between lines of Grimm with tired eyes
That bled bloodshot upon small shivers of pale lens
Till I had to rise and move pooled blood within legs
And relieve the ache of ages spent within dreams
And lines written upon white pages I soiled with dust
Then creased to float for some short while
Under the sky as she discarded her necklace of stars
And grew pale in skin

Half owned by light of waning moon
Midnight passes yet again
and Wilhelm gathered up stained pages
daring to brush against her arm as he rose to go
then swore within he heard the inhale
a short take of breath as they touched
and her
lean into him

bel1e
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since 2006-07-24

Posts 1631

1 posted 2007-08-03 08:31 AM

god, how I love your bedtime stories~~~
~siiigh~

~baby

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

2 posted 2007-08-03 10:55 AM

thanks Belle... the Grimm series was one I found interesting to explore.. could I have cpatured better the words and images, I might have been pleased to explore it more...

thanks for your kind words kid...

BBGrrl
Member

since 2007-07-17

Posts 181
BC, Canada

3 posted 2007-08-03 01:28 PM

This captures the true flavor of Grimm for me. Dark and delicious - some incredible imagery.

Once again, I am fortunate to have such teachers.

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

4 posted 2007-08-03 01:48 PM

Hi Ron...I enjoyed your twist on this story, but more, the sound of your delivery is so well tuned...it must be a musical. I'm glad to see you back today!

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

5 posted 2007-08-03 02:09 PM

Oh, to hear this read outloud would be a bedtime treat!

Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

6 posted 2007-08-03 03:26 PM

BBG.. thanks for the look see

Martie... sweatheart, thank you for looking in..and the kind words... always

Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

7 posted 2007-08-03 03:27 PM

Midnight.... my old hillbilly tongue would stutter around the words and not do justice to your expectations.... thank you ma'am.. for the eyes.. the kindness...

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

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Listening to every heart

8 posted 2007-08-03 09:48 PM

could I have cpatured better the words and images

~*~

O, I think you just did...

bel1e
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since 2006-07-24

Posts 1631

9 posted 2007-08-04 11:12 AM

Grimm explorations in Fairytale...now, that's my cup of tea...

~never say never~

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~smooches~

secondhanddreampoet
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since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

10 posted 2007-08-06 09:00 PM

a most interesting ‘write’!

I am particularly fond of:

“Half the moon owned the sky
As the other half lay with the shadows
Cast from far away in a languish of waning days
As marked the ebb of tides upon distant sand
Bereft of daffodils or calla yet bloomed”;

“So shadowed realm of half moon stalked
The tick and swing of pendulum”;

AND:

“relieve the ache of ages spent within dreams”

applause!!

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

11 posted 2007-08-07 12:40 PM

Oh, wowsers! *S* I was mesmerized by the time I finished the first verse... couldn't read fast enough... then had to go back so I could savor! *S*

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

12 posted 2007-08-07 03:37 PM

thank you all.. for the kind words..for the eyes..

all are greatly appreciated.

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